The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake’s water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake’s water is evaporating faster than it is being replaced by rainfall or rivers. If the trend continues, the lake’s water will soon become so salty that the lake will be unable to support fish and bird populations. The lake would then become essentially a dead zone. Fortunately, there are several ways to reverse the trend that is threatening the lake’s health.
One option is direct removal of salt from the lake’s water in special desalination facilities. Water from the lake would be pumped into the facilities and heated. This would cause the water to evaporate into steam, while salt and other materials dissolved in the water would be left behind. The steam would then be cooled down and returned to the lake as salt-free water. Gradually, the high salt levels would be reduced and the lake’s overall health would be restored.
Another possible solution is to dilute the salt level in the lake with water from the ocean. Since water in the Pacific Ocean is 20 percent less salty than water in the lake, bringing ocean water into the lake would decrease the lake’s salinity. The ocean water could be delivered through pipelines or canals.
Yet another solution would be to control the lake’s salinity by constructing walls to divide the lake into several sections. In the smaller sections, salinity would be allowed to increase. However, in the main and largest section, salinity would be reduced and controlled by, among other things, directing all the freshwater from small rivers in the area to flow into that main section of the lake.
The trend of salinity's increase, is the focus of both the writer and the professor. In the writing, three suggests, including deaslination facilities, ocean water, and contructing walls, have been elaborated. The professor ,however, claims that these recommendations are not convincing.
As oppoesd to the writer's idea that building special desalination faclities can cause the water to evaporate, then the water return to the lake, and salt would be left behind, and so the high levels of salt woule be reduce, the professor states that there would be other problems by using thie way. She advances the theory by saying that the leftover would include some toxic chemicals, if these chemicals went out into the air, it would harm human's healths.
The professor continues to discredit the writing's assertion that using ocean water to dilute the level of the salt, by examining the fact that it is not practical. In detail, she points out that the local government don't have enough resources to build such a long pipelines or canals, beacuse it is too expensive.
It is the professor's third argument that the walls would be not reliable and cannot builded so long, which contradicts the view of the writer that constructing walls is a good way to divide the lake and reduce the main section's the salt level of the lake. To explore deeper, the professor contends that this place has frequent earth activities, which can eventually destruct the walls, and so the main section and the small section will mixed again, which can not reach the aim.
An apparent divide exists between the writer and the professor on the ways of reducing the high salt levels.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Line 3, column 19, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...re not convincing. As oppoesd to the writers idea that building special desalination...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writings'' or 'writing's'?
Suggestion: writings'; writing's
...he professor continues to discredit the writings assertion that using ocean water to dil...
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Line 5, column 217, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...he points out that the local government dont have enough resources to build such a l...
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Line 7, column 438, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'mix'
Suggestion: mix
...main section and the small section will mixed again, which can not reach the aim. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1386.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 278.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98561151079 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.588408827 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 145.348785872 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575539568345 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.7979942405 49.2860985944 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.6 110.228320801 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8 21.698381199 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 7.06452816374 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158917845125 0.272083759551 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573293805232 0.0996497079465 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665488734195 0.0662205650399 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0782693255316 0.162205337803 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399541463485 0.0443174109184 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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