Scholarship

Essay topics:

Scholarship

The reading passage provides the criteria that the student should fulfill to be offered a scholarship. While, The listening passage provides the information about the two students who are finalists and are in the race of getting a scholarship.

In reading passage, there are four factors set up by the committee which they would look for in the deserving student. First, the student should be majoring in journalism. Second, should be having high grades which indicated his good education. Third, should be well-rounded that is should be involved in various activities. Fourth, should have served the community in a such a way that he improve lives of people.

The listening passage provide information about two students respectively. First student is majoring in journalism and have half A's and half B grades in journalism. He was also involved in extra co-curricular activities such as member of students council, player of soccer team, played violin and also took photography classes. The student use to go off campus and usually volunteered in hospital and old homes.

While, the second student is majoring in Biology and has also taken up journalism as he thinks of being investigative journalist in field of Biology. The student have scored straightforward A grades in each field. Nevertheless, the student is mostly working in biology labs and is continuously doing research. The student is most of the time on campus but sometimes goes to local sporting event.

So, it can be concluded that the First student is the deserving student who should get scholarship as he is good at everything other than the academics.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... the information about the two students who are finalists and are in the race of gettin...
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Line 3, column 281, Rule ID: IS_SHOULD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'it'?
Suggestion: it
...ion. Third, should be well-rounded that is should be involved in various activitie...
^^
Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n extra co-curricular activities such as member of students council, player of so...
^^
Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...o took photography classes. The student use to go off campus and usually volunteere...
^^^
Line 7, column 191, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A grade' or simply 'grades'?
Suggestion: A grade; Grades
...The student have scored straightforward A grades in each field. Nevertheless, the studen...
^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'look', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'well', 'while', 'such as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.256849315068 0.261695866417 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.191780821918 0.158904122519 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0650684931507 0.0723426182421 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0342465753425 0.0435111971325 79% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0239726027397 0.0277247811725 86% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126712328767 0.128828473217 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0684931506849 0.0370669169778 185% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.94131518112 2.5805825403 114% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0102739726027 0.0208969081088 49% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0102739726027 0.00154638098197 664% => OK
Determiners: 0.0958904109589 0.128158765124 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0308219178082 0.0158828679856 194% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.013698630137 0.0114777025283 119% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1635.0 1645.83664459 99% => OK
No of words: 265.0 271.125827815 98% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16981132075 6.08160592843 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.04852973271 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.422641509434 0.374372842146 113% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.309433962264 0.287516216867 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.2 0.187439937562 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.132075471698 0.113142543107 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94131518112 2.5805825403 114% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535849056604 0.539623497131 99% => OK
Word variations: 52.6416096594 53.8517498576 98% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0529801325 123% => OK
Sentence length: 16.5625 21.7502111507 76% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1341378906 49.3711431718 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.1875 132.220823453 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5625 21.7502111507 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6875 0.878197800319 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.39072847682 147% => OK
Readability: 47.5058962264 50.5018328374 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.80821917808 1.90840788429 95% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0580394819454 0.549887131256 11% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.124713263781 0.142949733639 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0746501084243 0.0787303798458 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.592237792148 0.631733273073 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.175149493392 0.139662658121 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0246429970222 0.266732575781 9% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518989901927 0.103435571967 50% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.327651638606 0.414875509568 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0652040147109 0.0530846634433 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0544169490584 0.40443939384 13% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676425183809 0.0528353158467 128% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.26048565121 235% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 3.49668874172 143% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.62251655629 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 9.0 3.1766004415 283% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 10.2958057395 136% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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