Shrimps 2

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Shrimps 2

The article and the lecture both deal with Turtle Excluder Device (TED). The author has several reasons for positive effects of this technology on turtles' life while the lecturer has a different point of view on this issue. The lecturer casts doubt on the main points made in the reading by providing three reasons.

First of all, according to the reading, TED has metal barriers approximately ten centimeters for preventing the hook of turtles. However, this technology works in this way which does not remove possibilities for catching shrimps. Nonetheless, the professor refutes this idea. She mentions that some small turtles also appear into boat`s nets and by the way plenty of shrimps are able to escape from fishers.

Second, the reading claims that the government creates a special Shrimp Turtle Law. It demands to install on all boats the TED mechanism. If the fishers do not do it, they will be prohibited to sell their goods. However, the professor disputes this idea. She is sure that will exist a lot of ships that will not utilize this technology.

Third, the author states that the USA manages most part of their economics and therefore require to validate a presence of TED on all boats which hooking shrimps. Without any documentation, neither Europe nor other countries could not sell their products in the USA. Another point that the instructor uses calls into question the reading is that international connections and business systems are hard to control. Also, there are no prohibitions for them to make false papers of certification.

In conclusion, the points made in the lecture contrast with the reading. The main idea in the positive effect of TED is effectively challenged by the lecturer who gives some rejectable ideas about it.

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Average: 4.7 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... positive effects of this technology on turtles life while the lecturer has a different...
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... different point of view on this issue. The lecturer casts doubt on the main points...
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... reading by providing three reasons. First of all, according to the reading, ...
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...mps are able to escape from fishers. Second, the reading claims that the gove...
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...at will not utilize this technology. Third, the author states that the USA ma...
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Message: Did you mean 'validating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
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...f their economics and therefore require to validate a presence of TED on all boats which ho...
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... make false papers of certification. In conclusion, the points made in the le...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, nonetheless, second, so, therefore, third, while, in conclusion, by the way, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 292.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08561643836 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68865716839 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599315068493 0.540411800872 111% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9533734402 49.2860985944 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2222222222 21.698381199 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 7.06452816374 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0699353345976 0.272083759551 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0230004661319 0.0996497079465 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662109082989 0.0662205650399 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.038470503701 0.162205337803 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471824219771 0.0443174109184 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.3589403974 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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