Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion
Private life is an essential part of every person's life. However, there is a certain group of people who adore being in the limelight and make a mess of their lives. I wholeheartedly agree that mass media pays a lot of attention to the lives of celebrities and popular people. The detailed explanation of why I think this way is presented in the following passages.
First of all, when somebody goes outside or takes a stroll around the city, he or she effortlessly finds a celebrity who is advertising a new product on a billboard or a well-known actress who is staring at people from posters or screens. We are surrounded by information about popular people; they become so close to us. That is the reason why media tryies to find out more about their lives by spying on them or making hype headlines in magazines. For example, I used to listen to the Korean band BTS on a daily basis, but since they gained worldwide fame and the media began to spread false information about them and haunted for details from their lives, it has become difficult for me to find the truth and my passion for them has waned.
Another reason is that celebrities' private lives provide a great opportunity for politicians and the public media to divert attention away from serious issues.Case in point: when the crisis hit and inflation was a hot topic among people, mass media created a ton of positive news on arbitrary topics such as cute cats or climate change. Furthermore, politicians frequently use celebrities to catch people's attention because they are a vulnerable and easily manipulable group.
Last but not least, there are not so many occurances and news items in the daily lives of ordinary people; therefore, if I need to print something in books or show something on television, advertisers are inclined to avoid difficulties and publish something about stars, singers, or bloggers. For instance, I am surrounded by students every day at the university; the student's life is pretty boring and consists only of studying and attending classes. This is the reason why my friends and I crave to know more about the fascinating and intriguing lives of Lady Gaga or Selena Gomez.
In conclusion, according to the aforementioned arguments, I firmly believe that TV and the Internet, in conjunction with another mass medium, draw a great deal of attention to celebrities. Popular people have a curious and entertaining way of living; people with power like to use them as a distraction from problems in society, and they are close to people's hearts and visions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...vate life is an essential part of every persons life. However, there is a certain group...
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Line 3, column 159, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Case
...vert attention away from serious issues.Case in point: when the crisis hit and infla...
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Line 4, column 368, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...udents every day at the university; the students life is pretty boring and consists only...
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Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...blems in society, and they are close to peoples hearts and visions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8623853211 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82818161157 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548165137615 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.4862547472 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.333333333 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0666666667 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.73333333333 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182130564462 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603500880194 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520326089196 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104262591334 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503404499159 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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