In this reading, the author declares three benefits of giving rewards or incentives to employees for achieving health-related goals. However, the professor in the lecture casts doubt on all of them.
Firstly, according to the passage, the author argues that awards and incentives provide motivation for people to stay healthy as shown in two surveys. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes that the benefits of incentive program are not impressive because the motivation will not last for long time. He points out in a similar study, which lasted for a long period, people motivated by awards and incentives to keep healthy went back to the previous lifestyle after two years. That is to say, people who quitted smoking started to smoke again and people who lose weight gained the weight back.
Secondly, the author argues that incentive program is fair for people who stay healthy to pay less health insurance fee or get more vacations because they are less likely to cause medical costs. In one hand, the professor admits that it is fair for the people manage to healthy life successfully. On the other hand, the professor also claims that healthy status depends on many factors. For one thing, people are busy for taking care of their parents or children may not have enough time to do exercise. For another, people own different ability to stay heathy. For example, overweight issue might springs from genetic aspects, which may not be controlled by healthy life style. Thus, it is unfair to those people to pay more health insurance than others.
Finally, while the author presents that incentive method could save money for companies in the long term, the professor doubts that by saying that this connection is unclear. He says that the effects of this program may take years to show up, however, the employees usually will not stay in a company for that long. Therefore, it may not be financially beneficial to company, because employees will leave and work in other companies.
To sum up, the author shows us three reasons in favor of the incentive program, which contradicts the main ideas of the professor in the lecture.
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...us depends on many factors For one thing people are busy for taking care of their...
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...ay more health insurance than others Finally while the author presents that incentiv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for one thing, to sum up, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 1373.03311258 127% => OK
No of words: 357.0 270.72406181 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88515406162 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40869648705 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 145.348785872 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504201680672 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 539.1 419.366225166 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 13.0662251656 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 357.0 21.2450331126 1680% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.2860985944 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1744.0 110.228320801 1582% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 357.0 21.698381199 1645% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 181.0 7.06452816374 2562% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199116418496 0.272083759551 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.199116418496 0.0996497079465 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121758099222 0.162205337803 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461498638418 0.0443174109184 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 180.1 13.3589403974 1348% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -282.42 53.8541721854 -524% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 5.55761589404 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 141.3 11.0289183223 1281% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.56 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 24.4 8.42419426049 290% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 10.7273730684 550% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 144.8 10.498013245 1379% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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