Although a fast-growing society provides more job opportunities than before, it is uncertain to specify secure and successful ones due to changing job market and technical skills required by different jobs. Thus, I strongly believe that we can effortlessly know what type of career has the potential to be successful and gives us a sense of security in the past. I feel this way for two following reasons.
For one thing, because the job opportunities offered by different industries and companies in the past were limited, the higher paid and stable job was more predictable. To be more specific, it was clear that the economy was not as robust as today’s society, so people in the past did not own many choices of job. Without various options to interfere with our judgment, a secure and prosperous career was evident for people to identify. Drawing from my mom’s experience, when she graduated from college, there were limited job choices for her. She finally decided to be a Chinese teacher in primary school, as a teacher was a notable job for stable and respectful back then. According to my mom, the well-known secure and successful jobs were lawyers, teachers, and doctors, which all were stable and high-paid. However, countless jobs are well-paid nowadays because of the robust economy and increasing demands in a different area, and people also tend to change diverse jobs frequently to gain more skills and experience. Therefore, it is an obstacle for today’s people to determine which type of career is secure and more successful.
For another, less competition in the workforce in the past resulted in obvious answers in secure and successful jobs. In detail, due to fewer people gained a high-quality education and few universities were supported by the government in the past, a successful graduated student from a college or university can easily get a high-paid job with less or even without competition. For instance, upon my father graduated from university, he got four offers from different newspapers, even some prestigious publications. However, things come different when my brother wants to be a reporter like my father. Because now everyone has access to higher education, and there are hundreds of individuals waiting in line for a vacancy there, a journalist is not considered as a secure and successful career anymore. Thus, people realize that it is difficult for them to spot a stable and well-paid job because of higher competition in each field.
In conclusion, compared to unpredictable career changes of today’s world, identifying a secure and successful career was simpler in the past because there were limited job choices and less competition in the labor force.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, as to, even so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00678733032 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79411398318 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468325791855 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 442.0 20.1344086022 2195% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2213.0 100.406767564 2204% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 442.0 20.6045352989 2145% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 127.0 5.45110844103 2330% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234312138616 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.234312138616 0.076458572812 306% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169356946097 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325488286133 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 223.2 11.7677419355 1897% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -377.15 58.1214874552 -649% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 175.7 10.1575268817 1730% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.26 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 29.27 8.01818996416 365% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 10.002688172 560% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 178.8 10.0537634409 1778% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 56.0 10.247311828 546% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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