Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
One of the most obvious ways by which one can ensure a decent standard of living and a relatively prosperous life is obtaining a kind of job that is going to be providing enough income and be stable sufficiently at the same time. Without such a career, it depends on chance or some exceptional talents that one might possess, to earn a sufficient living. In my view, in the past, it was much more convenient to identify what type of occupation would yield a desirable future than is the case today. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, back then this ferocious competition in the job market did not exist. To be more specific, Nowadays there is an over supply of over-qualified applicants for many job openings. As a result, getting a high paying job in one's field of interest has become increasingly challenging. My father's experience is a good example of this. Upon graduation from a moderate university, he sought to work in a local newspaper as a reporter. Having no prior experience as a professional reporter he was amazed how many offers he received from even some prestigious publications. The reason for such a warm reception was, of course, lack of people who applied for such a position. Consequently, these news organizations would employ young inexperienced journalists and even proposed courses to train them. My father, therefore, was able to transform into a proficient writer, earning him a worthy career.
Secondly, Because of the massive rise in population and resulting soar in demands for almost every possible goods and services, companies have expanded their production capabilities while hiring more workers. However, many of this vast entities do not pay a high salary. Thus finding a job, as was the case in the past, cannot guarantee a relaxing life. For instance, my uncle who is currently studying abroad had to get a part-time job in order to afford his personal expenses. Not having a work permit he was forced to get employed- illegally- in a fast food restaurant for a while. According to him the conditions there were abysmal. Many workers including legally-hired ones, had to work extended hours without any benefits or extra pay. Furthermore, owing to the fact that there were hundreds of individuals waiting in line for a vacancy there, most of the employees were paid the minimum wage, which was not anywhere near enough to provide for a single person's expense in a month.
In sum, I hold the view that in this day and age it is tremendously difficult to predict what kind of profession will result in a bright future for one. Not only is it extremely challenging to procure a job that gets you enough money, but also getting many of the available jobs will not bring about a successful life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, while, as for, even so, for instance, i feel, kind of, of course, as a result, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2320.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82328482328 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85164673928 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602910602911 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6517820474 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.869565217 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9130434783 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.69565217391 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142507989042 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0389231923491 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368278270532 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876623407054 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236087520846 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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