T P O-48 - Integrated Writing Task
In this set of material, the reading passage mentions three possible reasons for preventing the decreasing population of frogs. However, the lecturer, finds all the ideas complicate of very expensive to perform and provides some evidences to support.
First of all, the reading passage claimed that pesticides,which is widely use by farmers, can damage frogs and cause to extinctions. The reading suggest that governors should make some laws that limit and prohibit farmer from using dangerous pesticides, especially near place which contains large number of frogs. In contrast, the lecturer believes that it is really unfair and uneconomical to forbid farmers from using pesticides. She believed that preventing farmers from using pesticides cause farmers to loose most of their crops and this is a disadvantage which makes their products more expensive or reduces their net income. Thus, this solutions is rejected by the lecturer.
Second of all, the reading claimed that fungus is major factor in declination of frog's population. If we able to fight against it, it would be effective in frog's population growth. So, the reading suggests that use the latest method to treat or prevent infection which includes kill fungus with high temperature or anti-fungal treatment. On the contrary, the lecturer gave some explanation which indicated that this methods are totally impractical. She said that each frog should be individually receive the treatment; which means all of the frogs should be capture and receive medications, that is very hard to implement. Furthermore, as these treatments do not pass from parents to children genetically, this cycle of treatment should be repeat in every generation of frogs. Therefore, as the recommendations which provided by reading is not practical, it is refused by the lecturer.
Finally, the reading stated that frogs are loosing their population because their habitats are disappear or in endangered by human activities. So, if humans protect wetlands such as lakes, marshes and rivers from excessive water use for irrigation, industrial or hygiene purposes, we can save frog species from extinction. Conversely, the lecturer contends that draining wetlands is rooted in global warming not excessive use of humans. Although she believe that the idea of preserving lakes and marshes from disappearing, we should look it through a more broader perspective and try to solve global warming primarily. If we succeed in solving global warming, we can save wetland and consequently, frog too.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
... reading passage claimed that pesticides,which is widely use by farmers, can damage fr...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'used'.
Suggestion: used
...claimed that pesticides,which is widely use by farmers, can damage frogs and cause ...
^^^
Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
...s and cause to extinctions. The reading suggest that governors should make some laws th...
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Line 3, column 509, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[3]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
... from using pesticides cause farmers to loose most of their crops and this is a disad...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 639, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...sive or reduces their net income. Thus, this solutions is rejected by the lecturer. ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e some explanation which indicated that this methods are totally impractical. She sa...
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Line 5, column 532, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ally receive the treatment; which means all of the frogs should be capture and receive med...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 559, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'captured'?
Suggestion: captured
... which means all of the frogs should be capture and receive medications, that is very h...
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Line 5, column 741, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'repeated'?
Suggestion: repeated
...ally, this cycle of treatment should be repeat in every generation of frogs. Therefore...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 96, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'disappeared'.
Suggestion: disappeared
...r population because their habitats are disappear or in endangered by human activities. S...
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Line 7, column 451, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'believes'.
Suggestion: believes
...t excessive use of humans. Although she believe that the idea of preserving lakes and m...
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Line 7, column 552, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'broader' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: broader
...sappearing, we should look it through a more broader perspective and try to solve global war...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, really, second, so, therefore, thus, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 30.3222958057 158% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2146.0 1373.03311258 156% => OK
No of words: 395.0 270.72406181 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43291139241 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90551525675 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 145.348785872 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549367088608 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 419.366225166 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 3.25607064018 307% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7665075195 49.2860985944 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.947368421 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52631578947 7.06452816374 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 4.19205298013 286% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 4.45695364238 224% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36654035358 0.272083759551 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106713280579 0.0996497079465 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807049505113 0.0662205650399 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198480965611 0.162205337803 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.093927859372 0.0443174109184 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 53.8541721854 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 63.6247240618 193% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.