TOEFL T P O 20 - Integrated Writing Task
The reading and the lecture are both about the special policy in the United States "let it burn" for te natural fire in forests to not extinguish them. And in summer 1988 the huge long-lasted fire happened in a national park Yellowstone that lasted for two months and after that destroyed a vast area of the park and for this reason and lots of destruction many people asked to abolish that policy. new policy was put out fire as soon as possible. The reading states three types of damages that fire caused the area, and in the other hand the lecturer challenges the author's ideas.
First the author states that fire damages lots of trees and plantation in the area and makes the park very different from what was before, and in the contrary the lecturer mentions that the plantation of the forest was so diverse and now the plantation has more space to grow.
Second the text says about the destruction that happen to wild life and animals , that most of them go away because of fire and smoke, and the fire damage the food chain system. the professor argues that the population of the animals was so large and it needed to be replaced and now rabbit and hares are living there.
Third according to the text the tourist industry of the area is damaged too, because fewer tourists come to see the park, and the lecturer explain that only if fire happens every year that would be possible and now the tourist industry in ok and no damage has been happened to it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 410, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: New
...ny people asked to abolish that policy. new policy was put out fire as soon as poss...
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Line 9, column 80, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ion that happen to wild life and animals , that most of them go away because of fi...
^^
Line 9, column 179, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... the fire damage the food chain system. the professor argues that the population of...
^^^
Line 13, column 139, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s come to see the park, and the lecturer explain that only if fire happens every ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 7.30242825607 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1223.0 1373.03311258 89% => OK
No of words: 266.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5977443609 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22578443326 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533834586466 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 381.6 419.366225166 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 21.2450331126 155% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.2624574406 49.2860985944 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.875 110.228320801 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.25 21.698381199 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 7.06452816374 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.3589403974 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 53.8541721854 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 12.2367328918 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.7273730684 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.498013245 145% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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