TOEFL T P O 24 - Integrated Writing Task

Both reading passage and the lecturer discuss about whether a 70 million year old fossil of T, rex contained actual tissues. The article maintains the materials found in T.rex are exactly remains of blood vessels, red blood cells and collagen matrix. However, the professor casts doubt on all of the points for the following reasons.

Firstly, the author in the passage believe that there is flexible organic substance inside the channels of the fossilized leg bone. Nonetheless, the lecturer refutes that the substance might be something else. After dinosaurs die, some bacteria will colonize their bodies. Thus those remains could be the residues of bacteria colonies instead of blood vessels.

In addition, the reading passage contends that there are some spheres found in microscopic examination, and those spheres might be red blood cells as tests indicates the spheres contained iron. However, the professor disagrees with the idea, and he argues that in fact researchers also found identical spheres on other animals and organisms that lived without blood cells. As a result, the spheres are probably just other minerals.

Last but not least, the article believes that the dinosaur leg bone had collagen, which is a major component of living bone tissue. Once again, the professor mentions that collagen now we found could not be older than 100 thousand years, because collagen can not last that longer. Thus those bone tissues might not come from T. rex but from some human collagens.

To conclude, the professor effectively refutes all of the points presented in the articles.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 290, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
.... However, the professor casts doubt on all of the points for the following reasons. Fi...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...me bacteria will colonize their bodies. Thus those remains could be the residues of ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 282, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ause collagen can not last that longer. Thus those bone tissues might not come from ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 48, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...lude, the professor effectively refutes all of the points presented in the articles.
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, nonetheless, so, thus, in addition, in fact, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1347.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 255.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28235294118 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46655755861 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580392156863 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.7848106787 49.2860985944 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 7.06452816374 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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