TOEFL T P O 31 Integrated Writing Task

In this set of material, the passage and the lecture offer two opposing points of view about the origin of the line on Sinosaropteryx skeletal bones. While the article claims these lines cannot represent feathers and provides three reasons of support, the lecture states that these lines strongly belong to feathers and notes that reasons of the article are not convincing.
First of all, the passage argues that these lines can be constructed after the animal had died from the decomposition process. The lecture refutes this remark by pointing out the fact that other well-preserved fossils that have been found in that specific site indicate that this fossil has been preserved well, Thus the lines cannot origin from decomposition.
In addition, the article asserts that even if these lines are from the structure of the animal, the scientist cannot tell with certainty which part of its body these lines were. Some critics argue that these lines are much likely to be the fossilized remains of frills. On the other hand, the speaker abolishes this remark by illustrating the fact that these fossilized remains content beta-carotene, a chemical that is known to be observed in feathers, no frills.
Finally, the author declares that due to the position of these lines it is not promising to called them feathers because they could not function as flight structure. In contradict to this, the speaker claims that feathers have other feature functional like display function. She provides an example of pickup to support her claim and argues that due to the fact that these feathers were orange and white, they can be considered as display functions that had a role in attracting mates.

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Average: 8.5 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 73, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...t due to the position of these lines it is not promising to called them feathers because they co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, so, thus, well, while, in addition, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 279.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06451612903 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57328700093 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537634408602 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.2951401337 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.3 110.228320801 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9 21.698381199 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.7 7.06452816374 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325517900149 0.272083759551 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141692617556 0.0996497079465 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688218087662 0.0662205650399 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198541049761 0.162205337803 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691789734337 0.0443174109184 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.3589403974 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 53.8541721854 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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