TPO-32 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe

Since the dawn of civilization, people were engaged in social activities. They have always been great social movements and activity in different society. With the help of technology, these social activities thrive faster and easier and it seemed they would grow exponentially. There have been always controversial debates on the rate of influences that people can have on society. In this regard, nowadays, there has been a prevailing debate amongst people that young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Personally speaking, I am in favor of this remark. I assert my viewpoint for two reasons and will illustrate them in the following.
The first aspect to be mentioned is that by a historical survey, one can observe the growth of civilization followed by an enormous growth in governments. To be more clear, when societies started to construct, they realize that they need a centralized authority in order to rule over important disputes such as dividing water for irrigation of farms, as the society evolved, the central authority flourishes rapidly and became a source of power. Nowadays, the governments are becoming the principal part of every society and they make the most important decision for the future f the society, not young people. They are not accepted in taking serious roles in government due to the fact that they have not enough wisdom to make such decisions. In other words, the young people have been eliminated from taking a role in the future destiny of their society.
Apart from the point discussed above, let consider the fault of young people as an issue. Modern youth do not engage themselves in social activities as they did many years ago. This phenomenon can be observed in many countries in which young people are facing lots of difficulties to afford their living costs. In a modern country, a lot of effort is required in order to afford the daily costs of living. One may work hard to be able to live in the cities that require a lot of time and energy. Based on this, young people do not have the time or energy to participate in social activities. Their mind is too busy with their personal lives in a way that they do not consider the social future as their concern. They also have accepted the fact that the government owes the society and its future is in the government hands. Let me take myself as an example, I should work in two places in order to be able to afford my living costs, and that takes my whole concern and energy, thus I am not willing to participate in social activities.
All in all, according to the aforementioned points and example, I am willing to conclude that these days, young people do not engage in their society decisions toward the future. However, there are opposing beliefs that the young people do care about the future of their society but I cling to my viewpoint from the standpoint of the experience that I have from my own country and I believe that can elaborate to other countries as well.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, thus, well, apart from, such as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2517.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 528.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76704545455 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63192914993 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464015151515 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 812.7 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2212537845 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.434782609 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9565217391 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78260869565 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214208610331 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662003960877 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719695380179 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142594562249 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041623531787 0.0645574589148 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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