TOEFL T P O 42 - Integrated Writing Task
In this set materials, the reading passage state that in a modern era, most people tend to use some glass as materials for building, but the birds cannot see this glass and they are crash with building and harmed. On the other word, the listening section brings into question the reading by providing different reasons (and examples).
First of all, the reading passage indicates that people can use one_way glass that from the other side it just resembles a mirror instead of glass; in contrast, the lecturer opposes this view by mentioning that one-way glass as the same as the mirror work; therefore, birds do not understand about a mirror. If this glass reflex sky or tree, the birds may try to flay to them; hence, they are harmed.
Secondly, the reading argues that people can use some line or colourful glass for building; conversely, what the lecturer believes is different. He points that use some line for the glass does not cover all of the surfaces, and, from a bird's point of view, these spaces are holes through which they can fly. Also use colourful glass is inefficiency, because the buildings are becoming dark.
finally, according to the reading, use the magnetic field around the building can guide birds to find navigation; therefore, they can not crash with the building. However, the lecturer believes that the birds use earth magnetic field to find navigation for long distance. For example, when birds want to migrate from a cold place to a warm place, they must use a magnetic field to find their ways. In contrast, in the city and short distance, birds use their eyes, sunlight, and bright to find their ways. Hence, this solution is not effective.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 204, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... some line for the glass does not cover all of the surfaces, and, from a birds point of vi...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 309, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...s are holes through which they can fly. Also use colourful glass is inefficiency, be...
^^^^
Line 9, column 314, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
... holes through which they can fly. Also use colourful glass is inefficiency, becaus...
^^^
Line 14, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Finally
...e buildings are becoming dark. finally, according to the reading, use the magn...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in contrast, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 288.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89583333333 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37340549139 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520833333333 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.4928985348 49.2860985944 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.5 110.228320801 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06452816374 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424492547876 0.272083759551 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157147585869 0.0996497079465 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782188868817 0.0662205650399 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257251152585 0.162205337803 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253855346286 0.0443174109184 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.3589403974 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 53.8541721854 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.7273730684 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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