TOEFL TPO 34 - Integrated Writing Task

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TOEFL TPO 34 - Integrated Writing Task

In the set materials, the reading passage brings 3 main reasons for declining the sea cows' population such as overhunting by native people, decreasing food source and overhunting by European people. On the other hand, the listening section brings into question the reading by providing different reasons (and examples).

First of all, the reading passage indicates that the sea Cows were the main source of food for Siberian people; therefore, the sea cows' population were decreasing by overhunting with native people. In contrast, the lecturer opposes this view by mentioning that each sea cow had 10 tons and 9 meters long; hence, they were so huge animals. A couple of sea cows were enough for eating some month of native people. Also, the population of native people were small; hence, they did not need to overhunting the sea cow.

Secondly, the reading argues that the main source of food the sea cow became extinct by ecosystem disturbances; hence, they did not have enough food; conversely, what the lecturer believes is different. He points out that the ecosystem change had an effect on all spices. Considering whale for instance. We have not been reporting for declining the population of the whale. As the result, the sea cow did not face with a shortage of food.

Finally, according to the reading, some European people overhunted the cows for their fur. However, the speaker believes that the sea cows' population was quite small when European came to the island. Therefore, something was causing a massive decline in the sea cows' population long before the time European arrived there, so they were not the main reason for the sea cows' extinction.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cows'' or 'cow's'?
Suggestion: cows'; cow's
...gs 3 main reasons for declining the sea cows population such as overhunting by nativ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...food for Siberian people; therefore, the sea cows population were decreasing by o...
^^
Line 3, column 133, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cows'' or 'cow's'?
Suggestion: cows'; cow's
...or Siberian people; therefore, the sea cows population were decreasing by overhunti...
^^^^
Line 8, column 135, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cows'' or 'cow's'?
Suggestion: cows'; cow's
...ever, the speaker believes that the sea cows population was quite small when Europea...
^^^^
Line 8, column 263, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cows'' or 'cow's'?
Suggestion: cows'; cow's
...as causing a massive decline in the sea cows population long before the time Europea...
^^^^
Line 8, column 369, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cows'' or 'cow's'?
Suggestion: cows'; cow's
...ey were not the main reason for the sea cows extinction.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, finally, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 276.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07246376812 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62227744612 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492753623188 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 426.6 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7944935473 49.2860985944 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06452816374 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.521122581392 0.272083759551 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198715538811 0.0996497079465 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123015978614 0.0662205650399 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.33700774268 0.162205337803 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0986680486272 0.0443174109184 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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