TPO-01 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, employees typically work five days a week for eight hours each day. However, many employees want to work a four-day week and are willing to accept less pay inorder to do so. A mandatory policy requiri

The reading and the lecture are discussing a suggested plan of offering a four-day work for 80% of the salary instead of five days with full salary. The reading presents many advantages for the new suggested policy, however the lecturer casts doubts on all these claims.

First, the reading mentions that this new policy will increase the possible profits of the companies because they will pay the same amount of money with larger numbers of employees, on the other hand, the lecturer refutes this claim by stating that the new employees may cause the company to pay more money. He elaborates as follows. The new workers will certainly need more training, more office space and medical insurance. As a result companies might find that they have to pay more money than they expected which will lead to losing money instead of gaining profits.

Second, The reading claims that the new policy will reduce the employment and will reflect positively on both the individuals and the companies. The lecturer rebuts this by explaining that that it could not lead to any new jobs since some companies may ask the recent employees to work paid overtime rather than hiring new employees. Moreover, the companies can raise their expectations and ask their works to do the same work that is done as full-time employees which will impose a new burden on the those employees. Additionally, the workers who will participate in this policy are liable than others to get fired during any economical crisis. Another possible effect is that those workers will not work on developing their skills and likely to be less efficient. As a result of these factors, the standard of the employees'life will decrease, contrary to what the reading claims.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng a four-day work for 80% of the salary instead of five days with full salary. T...
^^
Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ore office space and medical insurance. As a result companies might find that they...
^^
Line 5, column 185, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
... The lecturer rebuts this by explaining that that it could not lead to any new jobs since...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 281, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ompanies may ask the recent employees to work paid overtime rather than hiring ne...
^^
Line 5, column 629, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...ble than others to get fired during any economical crisis. Another possible effect is that...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9724137931 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51006061294 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527586206897 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1467501558 49.2860985944 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.166666667 110.228320801 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 7.06452816374 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278907762272 0.272083759551 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941442183304 0.0996497079465 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774983308918 0.0662205650399 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179878100375 0.162205337803 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256557069444 0.0443174109184 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.7273730684 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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