TPO-04 - Integrated Writing Task Endotherms are animals such as modern birds and mammals that keep their body temperatures constant. For instance, humans are endotherms and maintain an internal temperature of 37°C, no matter whether the environment is wa

The reading passage gives three pieces of evidence which claims that dinosaurs are endotherms like fossils are found in the polar region, leg movement and Haversian canals. However, the professor refutes all the three claims by giving the following three reasons.

Firstly, the passage claims that the fossils of dinosaurs are found in polar regions which implies that they are able to control their body temperature and hence they lived in polar regions. However, the professor disagrees. She says that back then when the dinosaurs lived in polar regions, the temperature of the region is warmer than now and hence the dinosaurs were able to sustain and not because of their control over body temperature which is the characteristic of endotherms. She also says that dinosaurs would probably hibernate or migrate to warmer regions when the temperarute\ of polar region drops.

Secondly, the reading passage states that the endotherms show physical activity like running. The dinosaurs were able to run because their legs are present underneath their body just like modern endotherms. Thus it claims that dinosaurs are endotherms. However, the professor refutes this point by saying that dinosaurs have high energy due to their position of legs. Furthermore, she explained that dinosaurs can grow to a very large size and have more weight. Thus she contradicts the claim that by running, dinosaurs cannot be defined as endotherms.

Thirdly, the passage states that Haversian canals in bones are indicators of endotherms. These canals also help the animal to grow rapidly. The presence of these canals in the dinosaurs is evidence that the dinosaurs are endotherms. But the professor opposes this point. She says that dinosaurs do have Haversian canals. But they have growth rings and the thickening of bones would happen if the growth is slow or stopped. This cycle of growing rapidly followed by growth halt or slower is not a characteristic of endotherms as most of these grow rapidly without a change in progress.

In this way, the professor refutes the reading claims by saying that polar regions were warmer, the position of legs and leg movement not a characteristic of endotherms and due to rapid and slow growth cycles in dinosaurs.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...their body just like modern endotherms. Thus it claims that dinosaurs are endotherms...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...a very large size and have more weight. Thus she contradicts the claim that by runni...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1373.03311258 138% => OK
No of words: 364.0 270.72406181 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20054945055 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65160275346 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.406593406593 0.540411800872 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 419.366225166 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.2737712442 49.2860985944 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.65 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 7.06452816374 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413432796154 0.272083759551 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136859090408 0.0996497079465 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847356145198 0.0662205650399 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235560478148 0.162205337803 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633877723985 0.0443174109184 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.42419426049 88% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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