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Both lecturer and reading passage discuss hydrogen based fuel cell engine. According to the article, hydrogen based fuel engine get the many benefits than internal combustion engine such as renewable energy, less pollute to the environment and economically cheaper. However, the lecturer states that it is true that petroleum and oil is finite source and harm to the environment but hydrogen based fuel cell is not solution of the problems.
To begin with, the lecturer oppose the first point made by reading passage that abundance sources available for produce hydrogen. He claims that hydrogen cannot obtain directly by present of water. In fact,the engine need pure liquid state of hydrogen and it is made only by artificial substance not natural elements. Besides, the storage of Liquid state hydrogen require high laboratory cooling technology because its need to keep at minus 250 degree celcius. Therefore, difficult to production and storage of the hydrogen.
Furthermore, the lecturer also refute the second advantage made by article that hydrogen based fuel cells solve the pollution problem because of hydrogen made by pure water and its not pollute the environment. He mentions that pollution decrease by use hydrogen based cell in car but pollution increase by factory which are production of the hydrogen because of pollution of burning gas and oil for production of hydrogen is harm to the environment.
Moreover, the reading passage emphasizes that fuel engine cell is more efficient. The lecture, in contrast, says that manufacturing fuel cell component need the plantenium for power supply. Platinium is more costlier element.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 206, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...in directly by present of water. In fact,the engine need pure liquid state of hydrog...
^^^^
Line 4, column 203, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'costlier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: costlier
...antenium for power supply. Platinium is more costlier element.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, in contrast, in fact, such as, it is true, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 5.01324503311 319% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1390.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 258.0 270.72406181 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38759689922 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69923326609 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515503875969 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.24741886 49.2860985944 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.923076923 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8461538462 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9230769231 7.06452816374 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433563352027 0.272083759551 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156310914699 0.0996497079465 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980931911386 0.0662205650399 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273214838406 0.162205337803 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101081655556 0.0443174109184 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.3589403974 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.8541721854 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.2367328918 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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