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Both the reading and the lecture are about the practical use of hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine. The author of the article believes that this engine is more advantageous than the internal combustion engine. Anyway, the lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the article. She believes that, even though some aspects of the reading might be true, the theory stated by the author is somewhat irrelevant when compared with scientific facts.

First, hydrogen is somehow a finite product when analyzing the extraction. The writer says that, unlike the petroleum, which existence will end soon, the hydrogen is present in many resources. However, the speaker mentions that its availability is reduced as it implies a complex process to extract it. It seems that this chemical substance is not found in pure form in the nature. Moreover, she indicates that preserving and storing it requires big efforts, since it should be kept in special recipients, under 233 Celsius degrees. This is a counter-point that contradicts the author' first argument regarding its easy availability.

Second, the pollution issue cause by automobiles, is not resolved by switching to hydrogen. This is due to the fact that the purification process for extracting pure liquid hydrogen, requires a lot of energy. In other words, even though coal and oil are not being used for car engine, producers will need petrol for obtaining the hydrogen. This is another strong standpoint that is in contradiction with the article.

Third, fuel engine-cell does not mean lower expenses, because their cost-production is pretty high. Although, it consumes less fuel, the price of such an engine is relatively high, because the engineers use platinum for building it. At present time, there is no other viable alternative, since the platinum is the only element that can support the chemical reaction inside the engine. This fact is directly contradicting the passage. In conclusion, the author and the lecture appear to be in disagreement regarding this topic.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e lecture are about the practical use of hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine. The aut...
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...ch existence will end soon, the hydrogen is present in many resources. However, t...
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...lability. Second, the pollution issue cause by automobiles, is not resolved by...
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...ther words, even though coal and oil are not being used for car engine, producers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, first, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, third, in conclusion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 10.4613686534 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1373.03311258 124% => OK
No of words: 323.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28482972136 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8557615211 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 145.348785872 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600619195046 0.540411800872 111% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 419.366225166 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0548897668 49.2860985944 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8421052632 110.228320801 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.10526315789 7.06452816374 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339384158065 0.272083759551 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083995224035 0.0996497079465 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900113800556 0.0662205650399 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184795817303 0.162205337803 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680573481005 0.0443174109184 154% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 63.6247240618 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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