Students at universities often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in an apartment in the community. Where would you prefer to live? Give reasons for your preference.
Educational system has continuously developed during the last century, and more and more individuals opt for attending higher education. This means that many people have to leave their houses and move to another town. While some students live in university dormitories, others prefer living in apartments in the community. From my point of view, the best option is the latter one. This is due to the fact that there is more privacy and security. I will explain my reasons, in the following essay.
First and foremost, living in apartment is more advantageous from the intimacy point of view, because there are not tens of colleagues who might disturb you at any time. In the campuses, students tend to pay many visits, and sometimes this might be disturbing because some want to rest, to study, or just to relax. Furthermore, apartments building are quite because most inhabitants are at work, at school, outside and so forth. Conversely, dormitories are always full with students who make a constantly uproar. For instance, I used to reside in a two room apartment along with two friends. Every time we had exams and projects, none of us made noise or had inappropriate behavior and we managed to maintain good grades. On the other hand, I had colleagues who were living in the campus, and they were always complaining that they have to use the library for studying, because there was too much noise in their buildings. Thus, apartments offer a better environment for studying or relaxing.
To continue with, dwelling in a community block is safer than in a campus. The inhabitants are families, old people, persons who work and all of them are concerned to have a calm, normal life. Campuses are full with students who drink, use drugs, have parties. Not to mention that stranger, dangerous people can enter the campus easily and create panic among students. My experience it is a compelling example of this. Back in college, I was visiting a friend who was dwelling in a dormitory, when suddenly we heard noise in the corridor. We looked on the keyhole and we saw a foreign man with a gun trying to break the opposite door. He was violent, slurring and threatening the girl who was living the next door. This happenstance terrified me and that moment I understood that staying in an apartment is a proper choice.
To summarize, living in an apartment building is more advantageous than living in dormitories. This is because, the environment within apartments tend to be more private and because students are less exposed to dangerous situations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, furthermore, if, look, so, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92361111111 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7715120305 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546296296296 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7618497902 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.08 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.28 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.12 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235543529095 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605908323884 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0985495758484 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153754283607 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524953774111 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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