TPO-10 - Integrated Writing Task The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in waters along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska. When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coast started rapidly declining a few years ago, it c

The reading and the lecture are both about the sea otter. Whereas, the author of the reading coins a statement that the decline in the population of otter is due to the pollution, the lecture suggest cast doubt on the statement by the author by proving the three defensive points which claims that the author of the reading saying are false.

First of all, the author of the reading posit that pollution is the only factor which cause the decrease in the number of the sea otter. For example, oil rigs and other substance of the industrial products which cause pollution has cause the death of the sea otter. However, the lecture disputes this point. He state that there is no sign of death sea otter in the sea which proves that it is cause by the pollution because he suppose that they were eaten by the predator.

Secondly, the author of the reading claims that there is also decrease in the other sea mammals such as seals, sea lions. The reason what has cause the number of sea otter to reduce also effect to the other sea mammals to decline. Nevertheless, the lecture refutes this argument. He argues that as the otter used to feed on whales and as the whales disappear the sea otter start to haunt the other sea mammals which cause the reduction in the number of those species.

Finally, the author of the reading suppose that the hypothesis of uneven patterns are outcomes as the result of pollution. He also states that in one place there is a decrease in the number of sea otter whereas on the other land there is stable number of sea otter which proves that the diminish of sea otter was due to the pollution. On the other hand, the lecture believe that the uneven pattern was caused by the predator. He also thinks that there is stable number of sea otter where the place is dark and rocky. So, he says that in those place there cannot sustain the predator thus there is no lessen in the population of sea otter.

In conclusion, according to the ongoing prediction and research the lecture conclude the fact that the decrease in the number of sea otter is cause by the predator not by the pollution.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'supposes'.
Suggestion: supposes
...it is cause by the pollution because he suppose that they were eaten by the predator. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 284, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...e number of sea otter which proves that the diminish of sea otter was due to the pollution. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 12.0772626932 182% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 30.3222958057 171% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 5.01324503311 299% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1373.03311258 127% => OK
No of words: 384.0 270.72406181 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53125 5.08290768461 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23021295539 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.354166666667 0.540411800872 66% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 541.8 419.366225166 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9046646062 49.2860985944 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.75 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.375 7.06452816374 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361137850743 0.272083759551 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1553098467 0.0996497079465 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855326143819 0.0662205650399 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229655760985 0.162205337803 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0893679802648 0.0443174109184 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 53.8541721854 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 12.2367328918 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.42419426049 86% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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