TPO-12 - Integrated Writing Task Jane Austen (1775-1817) is one of the most famous of all English novelists, and today her novels are more popular than ever, with several recently adapted as Hollywood movies. But we do not have many records of what she lo

the reading passage and the lecture are both about a portray of jane austen.the author of the article claims that this portray is indeed for jane austin and provides three reasons of support.on the other hand, the professor disagrees with all claims made in the passage and she says that the evidences presented by the author is not convincing.

first , the paragraph states that austen's family clearly recogmized the portray as a portray of the author.however, the professor refutes this point and explains that when austen family has the authority to use the portray in 1882,austen was dead for 17 years,this means that they never seen austen as a teenager .so,how can they recognize her face if they didnt see her.

second,the article explains the similarity between the portray and cassandra skitch .in contrast the lecturer opposes this poin and mentions that cassandra skitch in the first place is not for jane austen ,it's for one of her relatives,beacuse austen's family was too big and there was too many teenagers in that period of time,besides,cassndra skitch was not for jane ,it was for one of her relatives called maaryan .

third,the reading proposes that the style of painting used in the portray links it to Ozias,which is a famous portrait was active in the period when jane austen was a teenager.the listining rebuts this point and states that an old stamp was found on the back of the portray and this stamp is known as a stamp of a wiliam leig . in addition wiliam started selling in london when austen was 72 years old.

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Average: 3 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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the reading passage and the lecture are bot...
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... passage and the lecture are both about a portray of jane austen.the author of the articl...
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...ted by the author is not convincing. first , the paragraph states that austens fam...
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...y the author is not convincing. first , the paragraph states that austens famil...
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... that austens family clearly recogmized the portray as a portray of the author.however, the...
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...amily clearly recogmized the portray as a portray of the author.however, the professor re...
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... austen family has the authority to use the portray in 1882,austen was dead for 17 years,th...
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...ray in 1882,austen was dead for 17 years,this means that they never seen austen as a ...
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...nize her face if they didnt see her. second,the article explains the similarity bet...
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...er face if they didnt see her. second,the article explains the similarity between...
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...article explains the similarity between the portray and cassandra skitch .in contrast the l...
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...between the portray and cassandra skitch .in contrast the lecturer opposes this po...
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...n the first place is not for jane austen ,its for one of her relatives,beacuse aus...
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...ane austen ,its for one of her relatives,beacuse austens family was too big and there wa...
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...nd there was too many teenagers in that period of time,besides,cassndra skitch was not for jan...
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...oo many teenagers in that period of time,besides,cassndra skitch was not for jane ,it wa...
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...besides,cassndra skitch was not for jane ,it was for one of her relatives called m...
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... for one of her relatives called maaryan .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, second, so, as for, as to, in contrast, in the first place, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 30.3222958057 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 953.0 1373.03311258 69% => OK
No of words: 189.0 270.72406181 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04232804233 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88636991285 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 145.348785872 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560846560847 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 287.1 419.366225166 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 13.0662251656 23% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 63.0 21.2450331126 297% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 29.6984848098 49.2860985944 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 317.666666667 110.228320801 288% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 63.0 21.698381199 290% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 35.3333333333 7.06452816374 500% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 4.19205298013 501% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376182050737 0.272083759551 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.252154032964 0.0996497079465 253% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074581851783 0.0662205650399 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252154032964 0.162205337803 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074581851783 0.0443174109184 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.8 13.3589403974 253% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 15.99 53.8541721854 30% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.7 11.0289183223 242% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.84 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.35 8.42419426049 123% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 63.6247240618 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 10.7273730684 256% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 27.2 10.498013245 259% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 11.2008830022 250% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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