TPO-12 - Integrated Writing Task
Jane Austen (1775-1817) is one of the most famous of all English novelists, and today her novels are more popular than ever, with several recently adapted as Hollywood movies. But we do not have many records of what she looked like. For a long time, the only accepted image of Austen was an amateur sketch of an adult Austen made by her sister Cassandra. However recently a professionally painted, full-length portrait of a teenage girl owned by a member of the Austen family has come up for sale. Although the professional painting is not titled Jane Austen, there are good reasons to believe she is the subject.
First, in 1882, several decades after Austen's death, Austen's family gave permission to use the portrait as an illustration in an edition of her letters. Austen's family clearly recognized it as a portrait of the author. So, for over a century now, the Austen family itself has endorsed the claim that the girl in the portrait is Jane Austen.
Second, the face in the portrait clearly resembles the one in Cassandra's sketch, which we know depicts Austen. Though somewhat amateurish, the sketch communicates definite details about Austen's face. Even though the Cassandra sketch is of an adult Jane Austen, the features are still similar to those of the teenage girl in the painting. The eyebrows, nose, mouth, and overall shape of the face are very much like those in the full-length portrait.
Third, although the painting is unsigned and undated, there is evidence that it was painted when Austen was a teenager. The style links it to Ozias Humphrey, a society portrait painter who was the kind of professional the wealthy Austen family would hire. Humphrey was active in the late 1780s and early 1790s, exactly the period when Jane Austen was the age of the girl in the painting.
The main idea of both the reading and the lecture is about the who Jane Austen, most famous of all English novelist, look like and consider whether a portrait is Jane Austen or not. The reading points out some reasons to support that this portrait is Austen. On the contrary, the lecture says that the evidences which are provided by the reading are not at all convincing and provides some different points to refute all the reading's ideas.
First of all, the passage points out that the Austen's family clearly recognized the subject of portrait is Austen, and also gave permission to use the portrait as an indication of her. The professor, in contrast, asserts that when her family authorize the portrait Austen had been dead 70 years age, and her family have never seen her.
Secondly, the author averts that the teenager girl in the portrait is definitely similar to the one in Cassandra's sketch. The lecturer, however, refutes this point by mentioning that the relatives of Austen were very large. Moreover, although there were lots of teenagers in her family that could have resemble Austen, but the true is that the portrait in Cassandra's sketch is not Austen, and the portrait is Marry, her distant niece. Thus, the assumption that the portrait is Austen is rejected.
Finally, the author of the reading claims that the style of the painting is similar to Ozias Humphrey's style who was a a society portrait painter, and he was active when Austen was a teenager. The presenter, on the other hand, casts doubt on this claim by providing some reasons. he says that the mark of a stamp behind the blank canvass shows that this canvass was sold by Willine Leg when Austen was older than the girl who is in the portrait. Therefore, the girl in the portrait could not have been Austen.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'resembled'.
Suggestion: resembled
...teenagers in her family that could have resemble Austen, but the true is that the portra...
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Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'married'.
Suggestion: Married
...etch is not Austen, and the portrait is Marry, her distant niece. Thus, the assumptio...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 118, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: a
...imilar to Ozias Humphreys style who was a a society portrait painter, and he was ac...
^^^
Line 7, column 118, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...imilar to Ozias Humphreys style who was a a society portrait painter, and he was ...
^
Line 7, column 118, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: a; a
...imilar to Ozias Humphreys style who was a a society portrait painter, and he was ac...
^^^
Line 7, column 281, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...n this claim by providing some reasons. he says that the mark of a stamp behind th...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in contrast, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 10.4613686534 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 312.0 270.72406181 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75641025641 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36506321213 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487179487179 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 444.6 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5202034249 49.2860985944 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.153846154 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06452816374 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.561944734119 0.272083759551 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.225770747266 0.0996497079465 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11873249178 0.0662205650399 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.353628342743 0.162205337803 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730672903912 0.0443174109184 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 53.8541721854 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.