TPO-49 - Integrated Writing Task

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TPO-49 - Integrated Writing Task

Both the reading and the lecture discuss the possibility of navigation of Humpback whales by the stars. According to the reading, the author provides three reasons to claim that this whale uses the stars as a navigation leader. The professor, on the contrary, rejects all three reasons by saying that even though they are fascinating evidence, the reasons are not convincing.

Firstly, the author points out that the humpback whales are intelligent and have a more complex brain and also have a cognitive ability that helps them to use the stars for navigation. The lecturer, however, casts doubt on this theory by arguing that there is not an equal relation between intelligent and using the stars as a navigation and provides some examples. He says that there are some birds species like ducks that use the stars for navigation, but their cognitive abilities are only average let alone being high. Therefore, using the stars does not seem to have a connection with the intelligent and this ability in birds are instinct to born with. Finally, it would not be acceptable that humpback whales use the stars for navigation because of their intelligence.

Secondly, the reading asserts that the humpback whales migrate in a straight line and use an external object to be at the same position. The professor, by contrast, opposes this idea by saying that there is another explanation for this behavior and that is earth magnetic field. The humpback whales have a biomagnetite sensor on their brain which is sensitive to earth magnetic field, and they use this feature to be on the straight line. Therefore, having the biomagnetite in their brain suggests to orient them.

Finally, the reading passage contends that humpback whales use spy-hopping and this special behavior is an indicator that they look at stars for navigation. The speaker, nonetheless, totally refutes this explanation by saying that it is very rare for humpback whales to look at sats and also sharks do this behavior not for migration but for finding their preys. Therefore, humpback whales are using this feature to look around for an animal. Moreover, humpback whales also use spy-hopping during daytime when there are not any stars on the sky. Finally, the professor explains that this explanation is a pure explanation and nothing else and refutes the c

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'birds'' or 'bird's'?
Suggestion: birds'; bird's
...e examples. He says that there are some birds species like ducks that use the stars f...
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Line 5, column 490, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests orienting'.
Suggestion: suggests orienting
... having the biomagnetite in their brain suggests to orient them. Finally, the reading passage c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, look, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 22.412803532 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 5.01324503311 339% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1950.0 1373.03311258 142% => OK
No of words: 385.0 270.72406181 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06493506494 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65142012375 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436363636364 0.540411800872 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.0 419.366225166 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.195155376 49.2860985944 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.705882353 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6470588235 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 7.06452816374 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.494104281971 0.272083759551 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.183115312033 0.0996497079465 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891141340247 0.0662205650399 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.309670484698 0.162205337803 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0719487564402 0.0443174109184 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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