TPO-21 Integrated WritingGenetic modification, a process used to change an organism’s genes and hence its characteristics, is now being used to improve trees through genetic modification. It is possible to create trees that produce more fruit, grow fast

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TPO-21 Integrated Writing

Genetic modification, a process used to change an organism’s genes and hence its characteristics, is now being used to improve trees through genetic modification. It is possible to create trees that produce more fruit, grow faster, or withstand adverse conditions. Planting genetically modified trees on a large scale promises to bring a number of benefits.

First, genetically modified trees are designed to be hardier than nature trees; that is, they are more likely to survive than their unmodified counterparts. In Hawaii, for example, a new pest-resistant species of papaya trees has been developed in response to ring spot virus infections that have repeatedly damaged the native papaya tree population. Planting the genetically modified papayas has largely put an end to the ringspot problem.

Moreover, genetically modified trees promise to bring a number of economic benefits to those who grow them. Genetically modified trees tend to grow faster, give greater yields of food, fruit, or other products and be hardier. This allows tree farmer to get faster and greater returns on their farming investment and save on pesticides as well.

Finally, the use of genetically modified trees can prevent overexploitation of wild trees. Because of the growing demand for firewood and building timber, many forests around the world are being cut down faster than they can be replaced. Introducing genetically modified trees,designed for fast growth and high yield in given geographic conditions,would satisfy the demand for wood in many of those areas and save the endangered native trees, which often include unique or rare species.

The reading passage and lecture have conflicting opinions about whether it is better to use genetically altered trees for human consumption. The article strongly postulates that inherently changed tree can bestow us several great benefits. On the other hand, the listening adamantly delineates that although it has great sides, it may cause serious problems which we can not handle easily.

First and foremost, according to the author of the excerpt, this genetic modification enables trees to resist certain virus infections which cause normal trees to die out such as papaya tree population in Hawaii. Nonetheless, the professor offsets these points by declaring that it is only resistant to one condition, but in other circumstances such as climate, it will perish. Furthermore, she mentioned an example: some ordinary individuals will survive after any certain situations because they are unique as the way they are. While modified trees are identical, so they will all die simultaneously.

On top of this, the professor further asserts that it may have hidden costs such as innately altered seeds. it goes without saying that these roots are much more costly than the author assume it because farmers have to pay a lot of money for each time they plant it. These claims refute the writer's implications that it has decent economic effectiveness because it can grow more quickly and give more products than native trees.

The article lastly points out that it will save a great number of wild trees from extinction, so it will easily meet the growing demands. The speaker in the listening counters these indications by insisting that these genetically transformed trees tend to grow more aggressively than normal ones. Moreover, she says that they are sowed among wild trees, so they will definitely rob their essential supplies such as sunlight and water.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 109, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, lastly, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, while, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 22.412803532 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 300.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69701687054 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 145.348785872 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613333333333 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 419.366225166 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3993232401 49.2860985944 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.692307692 110.228320801 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06452816374 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322881069937 0.272083759551 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105396179024 0.0996497079465 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703217475634 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180860520005 0.162205337803 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340295047836 0.0443174109184 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.3589403974 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.42419426049 112% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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