TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

The reading article talks about the animal tissues found in the T.Rex fossil recently found along with the supporting details about the discovery of tissues. The lecture disagrees with the details mentioned in the passage and suggests there is not enough evidence to hold those details true.

First, the reading article points out that, broken bone of T.Rex revealed channels for blood vessels and the soft material found could be actual blood vessels. The lecture counters this theory and states that, it is highly unlikely to have blood vessels preserved for millions of years. Usually bacteria colonize the bones and leave behind traces of organic material. The soft and moist substance could be the residue left by bacterial activity.

Next, the reading passage argues that, microscopic examination revealed presence of spheres similar to red blood cells. Tests showed Iron is present, which is crucial for Oxygen transportation. However, the lecture refutes the claim and points out that, the same spheres were found in fossils of other animals, especially primitive animals which did not have red blood cells. There is a high chance the spheres are of any reddish mineral.

Lastly, the reading talks about, tests conducted on T. Rex leg bone showed presence of collagen- a fibrous protein. It is usually found in bone tissues. The lecture argues that, Collagen is found in fossils which are not older than 1000 years. It is impossible to find Collagen in 70 million years old fossil of T.Rex. Moreover, the professor adds that, human skin contains Collagen and the Collagen found could be of researchers’ handling the bones.

In conclusion, the lecture refuses all the claims presented in the reading article and states that it is highly unlikely that the bones have preserved animal tissues.

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Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Rex
...about the animal tissues found in the T.Rex fossil recently found along with the su...
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Line 3, column 62, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Rex
...ticle points out that, broken bone of T.Rex revealed channels for blood vessels and...
^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he spheres are of any reddish mineral. Lastly, the reading talks about, tests c...
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Line 7, column 315, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Rex
...gen in 70 million years old fossil of T.Rex. Moreover, the professor adds that, hum...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, lastly, moreover, so, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 292.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22602739726 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45933334675 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513698630137 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.6252522028 49.2860985944 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7647058824 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1764705882 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 7.06452816374 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38603278358 0.272083759551 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125378569453 0.0996497079465 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810550589937 0.0662205650399 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193792741205 0.162205337803 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.087779740097 0.0443174109184 198% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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