TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

Reading and lecture is about blood vessels, red blood cells and collagen matrix in the fossils of dinosaurs. Reading argues that those cells might be an original tissues of dinosaurs. While, lecture thinks that points made in reading are not convincing; he gave following reasons for his opinion:
First, reading implies that when fossils of T rex were examined researchers found out
small branching hollow channels and they contain small organic substance. Therefore, reading evidenced
that might be remnants of old blood cells. In contrast, lecture suggests that organic matter in and moisture
in the bones might be due to bacterial reaction. As a consequence, he witnessed that there is no possibility for residual
blood vessels in the fossil.
Second, reading states that researchers also discovered spheres which are analogous to red blood cells.
In addition, iron content present in those fossil strengthen that possibility. In contrary, lecture thinks that those
spheres might be just reddish cells because many primitive animals lack red blood cells. As a result, the argument
about the red blood cells can not be true.
Third, reading claims that fossils contained collagen matrix in the leg bone, that solidifies the statement that might be remains of T rex bone. However, lecture argues this statement made in reading, he affirms that collagen would remain active for about hundred years. In contradiction, these fossils were around 700 million years old, so that might not be collagen of T rex bone. Instead, professor put forth that scientists might shed their skin, when analyzing the fossils in that region and that might be the possible source of collagen. Thus, professor casts doubt on the statement made in the lecture.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'tissue'?
Suggestion: tissue
...s that those cells might be an original tissues of dinosaurs. While, lecture thinks tha...
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Line 8, column 38, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this fossil' or 'those fossils'?
Suggestion: this fossil; those fossils
.... In addition, iron content present in those fossil strengthen that possibility. In contrar...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 256, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
... collagen would remain active for about hundred years. In contradiction, these fossils ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, third, thus, while, in addition, in contrast, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1477.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 279.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29390681004 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54579717059 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537634408602 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.536059733 49.2860985944 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4666666667 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 7.06452816374 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 11.0 4.09492273731 269% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40473539588 0.272083759551 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146158325109 0.0996497079465 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867293219295 0.0662205650399 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160872834942 0.162205337803 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769361844131 0.0443174109184 174% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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