TPO-28 - Integrated Writing Task Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the North Pole. When he returned from the expedition, he claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. This report made him

Robery E. Peary was a well-known adventurer who set to reach the North Pole. Some scientists believe that he didn't actually go to North Pole. According to reading passage, The evidances that Peary used to prove his claims, are convincing but the lecturer thinks these evidance aren't convincing.
First, The reading passage mentions that National Geoghraphic Society put together a committee to conduct a through investigation of Peary's records and equipments. The committee concluded that Peary's claim is correct. But the lecturer thinks that the committee's conclusion isn't trustworthy. Because, the committee spent large money in Peary's investigation and their conclusion is biased.
Second, The reading passage mentions that other adventurer, like Tom Avery, made the same trek in less that 37 days, which Peary mentioned. But the lecturer thinks these two trips aren't comparable. Because Avery had much less food in his sled and also he used airplane for providing food in his trip. Also, the weather's condition was much favorable when Avery had the trek.
Finally, the reading passage thinks that the photographs that Peary made during his trip, prove that he went to the North Pole. This conclusion were made based on the sun position. But the lecturer thinks these photographs don't prove anything. Because the technology is really old and the photos may have became faded and blurred since he had his trip. Hence, the conclusion isn't accurate.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...h Pole. Some scientists believe that he didnt actually go to North Pole. According to...
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Line 1, column 278, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: aren't
... but the lecturer thinks these evidance arent convincing. First, The reading passa...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hinks these evidance arent convincing. First, The reading passage mentions that...
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Line 2, column 111, Rule ID: THROUGH_THOROUGH[1]
Message: Did you mean 'thorough' (accurate, exhaustive)?
Suggestion: thorough
...y put together a committee to conduct a through investigation of Pearys records and equ...
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Line 2, column 253, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'committees'' or 'committee's'?
Suggestion: committees'; committee's
...rrect. But the lecturer thinks that the committees conclusion isnt trustworthy. Because, t...
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Line 2, column 275, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: isn't
...r thinks that the committees conclusion isnt trustworthy. Because, the committee spe...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...gation and their conclusion is biased. Second, The reading passage mentions tha...
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Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: aren't
...But the lecturer thinks these two trips arent comparable. Because Avery had much less...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...uch favorable when Avery had the trek. Finally, the reading passage thinks that...
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Line 4, column 225, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: don't
...t the lecturer thinks these photographs dont prove anything. Because the technology ...
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Line 4, column 307, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...y is really old and the photos may have became faded and blurred since he had his trip...
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Line 4, column 377, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
... he had his trip. Hence, the conclusion isnt accurate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, hence, may, really, second, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 30.3222958057 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1221.0 1373.03311258 89% => OK
No of words: 232.0 270.72406181 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26293103448 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62281206593 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560344827586 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 367.2 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2465789711 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.3125 110.228320801 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5 21.698381199 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 7.06452816374 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 4.19205298013 286% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.27373068433 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372279436252 0.272083759551 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113710618437 0.0996497079465 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110872582858 0.0662205650399 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22428965267 0.162205337803 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687371323185 0.0443174109184 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 53.8541721854 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.0289183223 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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