TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task Carved stone balls are a curious type of artifact found at a number of locations in Scotland. They date from the late Neolithic period, around 4,000 years ago. They are round in shape; they were carved from several types o

Carved stone balls are artifcts that found is Scotland. They have different shape and they have made by different stones. The author mentions some theories and their evidances about the meaning of stone balls. But the lecturer thinks these evidances aren't convincing and have contradiction with other evidances.
The author thinks that Scottish people used stone balls as a weapon for hunting and fighting. Because, some stones have hole in them and grooves on the surface which allows people to swing and throw it. But the lecturer thinks arrow must have signs for ware and there are no damages on the main body of stone bells which cotradicts with the theory that presented in reading passage.
The author mentions that Scottish people used stone balls as a primative system for weighting and measuring. Because they were designed with the same size. But the lecturer thinks that stone bells don't have same masses. Because, different stones were used for making stone bells and they have different densities.
Finally, the author thinks that stone bells reflects social status of the owner. Because, many stone bells have elaborate designs. But the lecturer thinks the theory is inconsistent. Because, ancient people used to barry the body of dead people with symbols that reflects the position of them which contradicts with this theory.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...But the lecturer thinks these evidances arent convincing and have contradiction with...
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...hese evidances arent convincing and have contradiction with other evidances. T...
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...e contradiction with other evidances. The author thinks that Scottish people u...
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Line 2, column 122, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'holed'.
Suggestion: holed
...and fighting. Because, some stones have hole in them and grooves on the surface whic...
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...ory that presented in reading passage. The author mentions that Scottish people...
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Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ive system for weighting and measuring. Because they were designed with the same size. ...
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Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ut the lecturer thinks that stone bells dont have same masses. Because, different st...
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...ls and they have different densities. Finally, the author thinks that stone be...
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Line 4, column 84, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ls reflects social status of the owner. Because, many stone bells have elaborate design...
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...urer thinks the theory is inconsistent. Because, ancient people used to barry the body ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 30.3222958057 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1126.0 1373.03311258 82% => OK
No of words: 218.0 270.72406181 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16513761468 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26852370824 2.5805825403 88% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 145.348785872 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48623853211 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 338.4 419.366225166 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0896414809 49.2860985944 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.0666666667 110.228320801 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5333333333 21.698381199 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 7.06452816374 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.27373068433 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403409122686 0.272083759551 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162650874147 0.0996497079465 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877935762565 0.0662205650399 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277812087004 0.162205337803 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729227622715 0.0443174109184 165% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 53.8541721854 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.0289183223 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 63.6247240618 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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