TPO-10 - Integrated Writing Task The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in waters along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska. When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coast started rapidly declining a few years ago, it c

The reading passage is about some reasons that caused decline in sea otter population. The reading passage and also the lecturer thinks that there would be two main reasons. The enviromental pollution and attacking by predators. The reading passage thinks that enviromental pollution is the main cause but the lecturer thinks that predators are the main reason of decline.
The reading passage thinks that increase in level of chemical and oil rigs in water is the main reason of pollution in Alaskan coast. Water samples showed increase in level of chemicals that could decrease the population of sea otters. But the lecturer thinks that no one can't find any otters that washes in shores. Hence this reason is not true.
The reading passage also thinks that other animals affected by this pollution are facing population decline. Hence this can be a fact that water pollution plays an important role in this problem. But the lecturer thinks that increase in hunting wales by human, changed otter's diet. Hence they hunt other smaller animals like the animals that passage has mentioned.
Finally, The reading passage thinks that uneven pattern of otter decline in different places is other reason that increase the chance of pollution. But the lecturer thinks that this uneven pattern is the result of uneven hunting by human. Decline of population is related to accessibility of otters in different areas. For example the population of sea otters didn't decrease in shallow and rocky waters.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s that there would be two main reasons. The enviromental pollution and attacking by...
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Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...l pollution and attacking by predators. The reading passage thinks that enviromenta...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dators are the main reason of decline. The reading passage thinks that increase...
^^
Line 2, column 3, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tors are the main reason of decline. The reading passage thinks that increase in...
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Line 2, column 274, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...rs. But the lecturer thinks that no one cant find any otters that washes in shores. ...
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Line 2, column 318, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... find any otters that washes in shores. Hence this reason is not true. The reading...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...shores. Hence this reason is not true. The reading passage also thinks that oth...
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Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ollution are facing population decline. Hence this can be a fact that water pollution...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 284, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ng wales by human, changed otters diet. Hence they hunt other smaller animals like th...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he animals that passage has mentioned. Finally, The reading passage thinks that...
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Line 4, column 362, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...or example the population of sea otters didnt decrease in shallow and rocky waters.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, if, so, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1251.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 244.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12704918033 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42294236228 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 145.348785872 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.430327868852 0.540411800872 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 391.5 419.366225166 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1493326467 49.2860985944 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.1875 110.228320801 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.25 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.875 7.06452816374 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284490291827 0.272083759551 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110775665643 0.0996497079465 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573018754163 0.0662205650399 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192146655521 0.162205337803 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289727115656 0.0443174109184 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.88 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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