TPO-29 - Integrated Writing Task Large numbers of dinosaur fossils have been discovered in deposits on Alaska's North Slope, a region that today experiences an extremely cold,arctic climate. One hundred million years ago, when those dinosaurs were alive,

According to the reading passage a huge amount of dinosaur fossils have been discovered in Alaska's North Slope. These fossils is the good evidence for the existence of the dinosaur in the North Slope region of the Alaska. The strange issue is that how dinosaurs can survive during the harsh winters of the North Slop which is so dim and dark at that era. Reading passage provide three reasons which they claim that the North Slop dinosaurs should migrate during the winters towards southern regions. Professor opposes to the each of the passage reasons. The reasons are about the migration probability of one of the most common North Slope dinosaurs, Edmontosaurus.

First, the passage claims that the Edmontosaurus should migrate because of the food shortage durig the winters. Professor opposes to this reason. She explains that in one hubdred million years ago, the summers were too hot and in southern regions the plants could not grow as well as North Slope region. So the rich plant source of the North Slope during the summer can support the Edmontosaurus in horrible winters. The dead leafs of the plants could be a good material for dinosaurs in winter.

Second, Professor says the living in the herds does not mean that the Edmontosaurus migrated in winter season. Although passage described that moving in herds can help the animals such as buffalo and caribou to coordinate their migration but this does not mean all of the animals use it in this way. She also uses Roosevelt elt as a kind of animal which does not migrate albeit lives in the herds. Also, herds can help many animals to relive from their predators.

Finally, Although Edmontosaurus could walk in high speeds and it was capable of traveling long distances but according to the professor speech, the young Edmontosaurus could not do that and they should be stay in the herds.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...d in Alaskas North Slope. These fossils is the good evidence for the existence of ...
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Line 5, column 262, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... their migration but this does not mean all of the animals use it in this way. She also us...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 206, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'staid', 'stayed'?
Suggestion: staid; stayed
...us could not do that and they should be stay in the herds.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, second, so, well, kind of, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1373.03311258 113% => OK
No of words: 315.0 270.72406181 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91111111111 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4732990852 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501587301587 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 461.7 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.612598887 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6875 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6875 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 7.06452816374 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364180633779 0.272083759551 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119114035355 0.0996497079465 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572042172559 0.0662205650399 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195649466534 0.162205337803 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789302097842 0.0443174109184 178% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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