TPO 30 question 1
The author opposes the idea that the Greek made the burning mirror to set fire in offensive ships. On the other hand, the professor argues that there evidences that proof that the Greek had made such wipon.
First, the speaker states that it is not necessary to make the mirror from a long or large sheet of copper. Recnetly, scientists made such large sheet of copper from small mirror that collected together to make the parabolic curvature which is necessary to set a fire. Thus, the Greek may make such wipon from such small mirror. In contrast, the writer explains it is not possible that the Greek could make such a large and wide sheet of copper that has parabolic curvature.
Second, the professor tells us that to set a fire in a ship, does not need ten mintues because ships at that time made not only from wood, but also from other materials like a sticky substace called pitch. The latter can catch fire in seconds even if a ship is moving. The author, however, questions the effectiveness of the wepon by explaining that wood of the ships needs at least ten mintues to catch a fire as an experiment have been done by scientists.
Finally, the professor mentions that the Greek wanted to surprise their enemies with a new, unusual weapon. Arows with fire were very familiar and enemies could notice them easily and could defend themseleves quickly. However, enemies cannot detect or observe the fire that could be caused by the bruning mirror. Therefore, the Greek bother themselves to surprise their enemies with unexpected weapon. On the contrary, the writer states that arows with fire have the same efficacy as the burning weapon. Therefore, he doubtes that the Greek would bother themselves by making such weapon.
the professor argues that there evidences that proof that the Greek had made such wipon.
the professor argues that their evidences that prove that the Greek had made such wipon.
from small mirror that collected together
from a small mirror that is collected together
that has parabolic curvature.
that has a parabolic curvature.
because ships at that time made not only from wood,
because ships at that time are made not only from wood,
as an experiment have been done by scientists.
as an experiment has been done by scientists.
by making such weapon.
by making such a weapon.
Sentence: Therefore, the Greek bother themselves to surprise their enemies with unexpected weapon.
Description: An adjective is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to Greek and bother
Sentence: On the other hand, the professor argues that there evidences that proof that the Greek had made such wipon.
Error: wipon Suggestion: weapon
Sentence: Thus, the Greek may make such wipon from such small mirror.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: wipon Suggestion: weapon
Sentence: Second, the professor tells us that to set a fire in a ship, does not need ten mintues because ships at that time made not only from wood, but also from other materials like a sticky substace called pitch.
Error: substace Suggestion: substance
Error: mintues Suggestion: minutes
Sentence: The author, however, questions the effectiveness of the wepon by explaining that wood of the ships needs at least ten mintues to catch a fire as an experiment have been done by scientists.
Error: wepon Suggestion: weapon
Error: mintues Suggestion: minutes
Sentence: Arows with fire were very familiar and enemies could notice them easily and could defend themseleves quickly.
Error: themseleves Suggestion: themselves
Sentence: However, enemies cannot detect or observe the fire that could be caused by the bruning mirror.
Error: bruning Suggestion: burning
Sentence: On the contrary, the writer states that arows with fire have the same efficacy as the burning weapon.
Error: arows Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Therefore, he doubtes that the Greek would bother themselves by making such weapon.
Error: doubtes Suggestion: doubted
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 15 12
No. of Words: 299 250
No. of Characters: 1398 1200
No. of Different Words: 143 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.158 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.676 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.227 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.698 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.605 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.152 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4