TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task Carved stone balls are a curious type of artifact found at a number of locations in Scotland. They date from the late Neolithic period, around 4,000 years ago. They are round in shape; they were carved from several types o

The lecture and reading passage both discuss carved stone balls found in Scotland. The author believe that Neolithic period carved stone used as weapon, weight system and social purpose. The lecturer casts doubt on claims made in the article. He says that each of author's theories unconvincing.
First of all, the author emphasizes that carved stone balls aided in hunting or fighting. This point challenged by lecturer. He mentions that neolithic period mostly used arrow and bow for hunting. If they used carved ball as weapon then crack and broken surface of the balls. However, presented balls have smooth and without damage surface. So, carved stone not helped for fighting and hunting.
Secondly, the author implies that carved stone application in weight and measurement things because uniform size of balls. The lecturer rebuts this theory. He explains that balls only in uniform sizes but not in uniform weight. Each ball made of various kind of rock such as sand rock, green rock, and cord rock. Each ball has different weight to each other therefore balls not were used for measure quantity of things.
Lastly, the author states that carved stone make social status of their owner. The lecturer,in contrast, points out that many stone balls were very simple which is not maintain status and in neolithic period when prestige person died, that time died person buried with his specific possession. But stone ball not found in any grave. So, it was impossible that carved stone served a social purpose.

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Average: 6 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'believes'.
Suggestion: believes
...one balls found in Scotland. The author believe that Neolithic period carved stone used...
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Line 1, column 188, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...apon, weight system and social purpose. The lecturer casts doubt on claims made in ...
^^^
Line 4, column 92, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
...cial status of their owner. The lecturer,in contrast, points out that many stone ba...
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Line 4, column 169, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'maintained'.
Suggestion: maintained
...one balls were very simple which is not maintain status and in neolithic period when pre...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, in contrast, kind of, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1266.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 249.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0843373494 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20632204586 2.5805825403 85% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578313253012 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 369.0 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 21.2450331126 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7509560156 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.6315789474 110.228320801 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.1052631579 21.698381199 60% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.471378530717 0.272083759551 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145918960004 0.0996497079465 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877465823687 0.0662205650399 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.295048988198 0.162205337803 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428612325957 0.0443174109184 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.3589403974 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 53.8541721854 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.0289183223 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.7273730684 42% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.498013245 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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