TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task Carved stone balls are a curious type of artifact found at a number of locations in Scotland. They date from the late Neolithic period, around 4,000 years ago. They are round in shape; they were carved from several types o

In this set of materials, the author of the reading passage explains three hypotheses of the carved stone balls meaning found in Scotland. However, the professor thinks that the author's theories contain some defects.

First of all, the author claims that the carved stone balls were probably used as weapons for hunting and fighting due to their inside have some holes and the balls easy for people to swing and throw it. On the contrary, the professor disagrees. She thinks that if the function of the balls had been used as weapons, the surface of the balls would have contained some damaged instead of smooth.

In addition, the author states that the balls were all in the same size, 70 mm in diameter, it is possible that it provided the function of the standard of the weight. However, the professor refutes the author's idea by indicating that although the size of the balls is all the same, the weights of the balls are totally different. Because the stone balls were made of the different types of rocks such as sand rocks, calcite or other rocks, and every rock has different density.

Finally, the author raises the point that according to the carved stone balls designed, it is possible that it shows that the social status of their society. On the other hand, the professor asserts that the designs on the balls are too simple to represent the social status. Furthermore, if the balls had shown the symbol of the social status, it would have been discovered at the tombs or graves.

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Average: 7.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 204, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ght. However, the professor refutes the authors idea by indicating that although the si...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, in addition, such as, all the same, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1241.0 1373.03311258 90% => OK
No of words: 261.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75478927203 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28594718399 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494252873563 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 365.4 419.366225166 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5042535548 49.2860985944 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.818181818 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7272727273 21.698381199 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8181818182 7.06452816374 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433333679428 0.272083759551 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161607899353 0.0996497079465 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882059819734 0.0662205650399 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267323953838 0.162205337803 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662966999825 0.0443174109184 150% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 53.8541721854 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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