TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task In the past century, the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to wildlife in the United States,birds in particular. Unfortunately for b

In this set of the materials, the author of the reading passage expresses three reasons that the number of birds in the United States will necessarily decline. However, the professor thinks that the author’s theories contain some defects.
First of all, the author claims that human populations and settlements continue to expand, and it would cause the decrease of the bird populations that depend on these vanishing habitats. On the contrary, the professor indicates that urban development may cause some type of birds decrease, whereas, it will increase some species of birds. Because some city dweller birds such as pigeons and rodents will increase, it would raise up the numbers of falcons and cocks, which prey on pigeons and rodents.
In addition, the author states that the growth of agriculture will result destruction of bird habitats, hence, bird populations in rural areas will decline. However, the professor asserts that in the United Stated, there are less and less lands for agriculture activities due to introducing new crops technology. Thank to this new technology, per unit of yield of the new crops is increased. Therefore, it unnecessarily needs lands for agricultures.
Finally, the author raises the point that the use of chemical pesticides will influence the populations of birds due to pesticides get into the water and into the food chain for birds where they can harm birds. On the other hand, the professor refutes the author’s idea by proposing that now, people are aware of the consequence of the pesticides will affect bird populations. Therefore, some people figure out two solutions. One is that new pesticides contain less poison than the past. Another is that growing more pest-resistance crops. It won’t harm birds at all.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 234, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun lands is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...n the United Stated, there are less and less lands for agriculture activities due to...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, may, so, therefore, well, whereas, in addition, such as, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1495.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 285.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24561403509 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82447204828 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6962929678 49.2860985944 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6666666667 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.13333333333 7.06452816374 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.471358225002 0.272083759551 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141473725562 0.0996497079465 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134790586225 0.0662205650399 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263237378479 0.162205337803 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0796788118404 0.0443174109184 180% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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