TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The author of the reading of the passage and the professor both discuss that whether or not it is possible that human can live on the Venus. The author is against the idea by explaining three theories. However, the professor thinks that the author's reasons contain some defects.

First of all, the author claims that there is at least 90 times pressure at Venus's surface than at Earth. And in that circumstance, all spacecraft will be crushed by that pressure. However, the professor disagrees. He indicates that we can build the station above 15 kilometers from the surface. The atmosphere above 15 kilometers is same pressure as on earth. Therefore, the station won't be crushed by pressure.

In addition, the author states that at venus there is no water and oxygen for humans to survive. On the contrary, the professor refutes the idea by contending that as the author says there are carbon dioxide, nitrogen and other factors on Venus' surface. We can use these compounds to produce the water and oxygen.

Finally, the author raises the point that there is not enough sunlight can reach the surface. So human can't use it to generate the power via solar power. However, the professor asserts that if we live above 30 kilometers from the surface, there won't be a problem. Because the clouds up to 30 kilometers not thick as the surface area, and the cloud could reflect the sunlight, we can use the solar system to collect both reflected sunlight to generate the power.

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Average: 7.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...age and the professor both discuss that whether or not it is possible that human can live on t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 104, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...unlight can reach the surface. So human cant use it to generate the power via solar ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, so, therefore, at least, in addition, first of all, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1226.0 1373.03311258 89% => OK
No of words: 254.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82677165354 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46523348889 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 380.7 419.366225166 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6435769357 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.625 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.875 21.698381199 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06452816374 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308533290839 0.272083759551 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0963547101442 0.0996497079465 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548825943621 0.0662205650399 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181543576111 0.162205337803 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700623540721 0.0443174109184 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.3589403974 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.2367328918 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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