TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

The lecture and the reading passage both discuss how glass using for the modern buildings is dangerous for birds. The reading claims that there are tree solutions to solve this problem. In contrast, the lecture says that these solutions are not effective.

First of all, according to the reading the architectures could use one way glass that is lead birds in one direction. When birds can not through a glass, they will grasp that a window is barrier. Therefore, they will not go trough it. The professor refutes this and says that it will have effect of mirror that birds do not understand too; that is why this solution will not protect birds.

Secondly, the text puts out that colorful designs will aid, because birds would see the strips and avoid trying to fly through the glass. The lecture counter this point by saying that spaces between lines will look like holes for the birds, and they will try to go trough these holes.

Last but not least, the reading points that magnetic field will determine a right direction for birds. The lecture denies that and talks that birds use natural abilities for understanding directions only during a long trip such as migration, hence these magnetic held to guide birds away do not work for short trips.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...how glass using for the modern buildings is dangerous for birds. The reading clai...
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Line 1, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...birds. The reading claims that there are tree solutions to solve this problem. In...
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Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nderstand too; that is why this solution will not protect birds. Secondly, the...
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Line 5, column 74, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...colorful designs will aid, because birds would see the strips and avoid trying to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, in contrast, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 30.3222958057 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1043.0 1373.03311258 76% => OK
No of words: 217.0 270.72406181 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8064516129 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23355455582 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 145.348785872 87% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585253456221 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 291.6 419.366225166 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.55342163355 84% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8592053279 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8181818182 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7272727273 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36363636364 7.06452816374 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.449878710457 0.272083759551 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168496168317 0.0996497079465 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116402927081 0.0662205650399 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259570157972 0.162205337803 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0848551449877 0.0443174109184 191% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.3589403974 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 53.8541721854 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.0289183223 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.42419426049 85% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 63.6247240618 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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