TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

In this set of material, both, the reading and the listening passage are discussing the danger that represent the windows glass in the buildings due to they are injured when try to fly through the windows. Nevertheless, the reading and listening passage are completely contradictory. Whereas the reading puts forwards the view about three feasible solutions the lecture refutes the reading points.

First of all, the reading passage develop the claim about one solution using one-way glass, the solution consist in design the window glass, transparent inside but the birds wont be able to see through and they will think it is a solid material. However, the lecture refute this solution, since affirm this kind of glass will reflect the sky and the bird will fly through it.

Secondly, meanwhile the reading support the point of view about colorful design, so that way consist in stripes paint over the glass, therefore, the birds will avoid the glass to not be hurt. Despite of this explanation, the lecture argue, the birds could try to pass between lines, thinking there is space between.

Finally, the last proposal presented by the reading, consist in using material with magnetic fields. The magnetic fields will produce the birds avoid the windows. As opposed with this argue, the listening explain that is not possible, since, the birds only use magnetic fields during long travels, for example in winter for migration. For that reason, it is not feasible to protect the birds to be hurt.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 285, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1260.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 248.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08064516129 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40618728549 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536290322581 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 365.4 419.366225166 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7216174753 49.2860985944 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.545454545 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5454545455 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5454545455 7.06452816374 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.445544575676 0.272083759551 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1593789369 0.0996497079465 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10925626627 0.0662205650399 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264966415035 0.162205337803 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106115077086 0.0443174109184 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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