TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo
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Submitted by janett9150 on Sun, 10/09/2016 - 04:22
I agree with the statement. Personally I have noticed that a lot the people do not have a good time management. This is important to achieve goals and be productive. Even though you can enjoy doing what produce you happy moments, is necessary be realistic and prioritize what is most important.
Firstly, people spends a lot time in the Internet, specifically young people. For example: they do not organize the time to use it to productive things as scholar activities. In the future, they will become in adults that do not have any great achievements. In my own experiences, unfortunately, I now a lot of young people who do not are working or studying, without ambitions. For the society, this person is useless and a burden with a life destroyed by bad decisions. So, they could take mistakes in their lives, as using drugs or making crimes in the worst case.
Secondly, even though, enjoy the life with recreates activities is convenient and healthy, when the person do not design a plan of activities to achieve their goals; the failures are a consequence of that. Maybe, this attitude is because the young people have not matured enough and thus, does not make the correct decisions. Always is important the guide for parents to help them to be a successful person. Nevertheless, only they must take decision to waste the time in the best way.
Thirdly, some people are really lazy. They do not want to expend time making things which required attention, creativity or effort. More over, they try to avoid responsibilities and have stress caused by the obligations. Thus, they prefer to go to the coffee, spend time with friends, go to parties and do everything what produce happiness and relaxing moments. This people does not get their dreams, do not looking purposes in the life. Practically, are mediocre person only making what is easy for them.
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'firstly', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'thus', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.209134615385 0.229887763892 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.194711538462 0.158761421928 123% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0865384615385 0.0866891130778 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0697115384615 0.046263068375 151% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0528846153846 0.0685040099705 77% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0817307692308 0.118717715034 69% => OK
Participles: 0.0432692307692 0.0351676179071 123% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8599452964 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0336538461538 0.0309702414327 109% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0841346153846 0.0887237588012 95% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0120192307692 0.0209618222197 57% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0192307692308 0.0139019557991 138% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2199.0 2387.08602151 92% => OK
No of words: 367.0 408.028673835 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.99182561308 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.348773841962 0.338922669872 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.25068119891 0.251872472559 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.182561307902 0.174417080927 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.125340599455 0.112833075102 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8599452964 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555858310627 0.524397521467 106% => OK
Word variations: 62.2909337253 59.2087087015 105% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.35 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.8597634832 48.84282405 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.95 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.35 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.7 0.644075263715 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 43.418119891 45.7405998639 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.05303030303 1.45489161554 72% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.493453071864 0.300154397459 164% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0592642929368 0.103427244359 57% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0592590693857 0.0752933317313 79% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.495300782337 0.497263757937 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.20241768451 0.151897553556 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146815814726 0.114077575197 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.175635550167 0.0781384742642 225% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.220082420499 0.336927656856 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.189990224227 0.067059652881 283% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316173023198 0.210909579961 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.316586965062 0.0618886996521 512% => Less connections among paragraphs
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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