TPO-43 - Integrated Writing Task Agnostids were a group of marine animals that became extinct about 450 million years ago. Agnostid fossils can be found in rocks in many areas around the world. From the fossil remains, we know that agnostids were primitiv

In the lecture, the professor makes a series of points that cast doubt on all the theories presented in the passage about the behavior of Agnostides. She states each theory has serious weaknesses that opposes to accepting them.
First of all, the speaker states this organisms could have not been a free swimming predators due having poor vision. She says only well developed eyes and good vision can help free swimming predators to be successful which is lacking in Agnostides. So this well developed sensory organ for chasing animal is not seen in the fossil remains.
Also, the professor points out that sea floor dwellers do not have the ability to move fast .So they try to make small geographic area. However the Agnostides made multi geografic area and spreaded around a large area.This showed they moved fast not slow and this theory is not correct.
Lastly, the lecturer refutes the theory related to parasites living by saying that they were not small size .So the theory is not applicable to them.She states parasitic population is not large and is in certain limit.Thus, they kill off all other organism when they grow large.In fact ,great size of these animals completely rule out the possibility of this form of living for them.

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Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...them. First of all, the speaker states this organisms could have not been a free sw...
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Line 4, column 92, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ers do not have the ability to move fast .So they try to make small geographic are...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...s do not have the ability to move fast .So they try to make small geographic area....
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Line 4, column 136, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...they try to make small geographic area. However the Agnostides made multi geografic are...
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Suggestion: This
...c area and spreaded around a large area.This showed they moved fast not slow and thi...
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Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
... by saying that they were not small size .So the theory is not applicable to them....
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Suggestion: So
...y saying that they were not small size .So the theory is not applicable to them.Sh...
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Suggestion: She
...So the theory is not applicable to them.She states parasitic population is not larg...
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Suggestion: Thus
...on is not large and is in certain limit.Thus, they kill off all other organism when ...
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Suggestion: In
...all other organism when they grow large.In fact ,great size of these animals compl...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...er organism when they grow large.In fact ,great size of these animals completely r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, lastly, so, thus, well, in fact, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1037.0 1373.03311258 76% => OK
No of words: 211.0 270.72406181 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91469194313 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4191144521 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 145.348785872 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625592417062 0.540411800872 116% => OK
syllable_count: 315.9 419.366225166 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.9763857909 49.2860985944 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.625 110.228320801 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.375 21.698381199 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 7.06452816374 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254289417809 0.272083759551 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928804448387 0.0996497079465 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555099455646 0.0662205650399 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125299349392 0.162205337803 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587290782663 0.0443174109184 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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