In the lecture, the professor makes a series of points that cast doubt on all the solusions proposed in the reading section for increasing salinity of inland lake which is in danger.She states the solusions are not realistic or practical.
First of all, the lecturer points out direct removal of salt from lake's water which is proposed by author could decrease the salinity but produce serious problems. She states it is true that by pumping water and heating it water would evaporate. Therfefore, the solid material would left behind like salt but there are lots of other chemicals in the solid part which some of them are toxic and harmful for people. For example, the selenium in the solid part is very toxic if breathed. So if wind distribute this selenium powder to the air and people breath them ,there would cause a very serious health problem.
Moreover, the speaker refutes the dilusion of salt level in lake with ocean's water as a solusion. She beleives this action needs lots of construction and pipeline which needs lots of budget. The distanse between the lake and ocean is long and needs lots of pipelineTherefore, due to not having enough budget by government is not practical.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: She
...inity of inland lake which is in danger.She states the solusions are not realistic ...
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Line 2, column 223, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'waters'?
Suggestion: waters
...ue that by pumping water and heating it water would evaporate. Therfefore, the solid ...
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Line 2, column 283, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'leave'
Suggestion: leave
...e. Therfefore, the solid material would left behind like salt but there are lots of ...
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Line 2, column 561, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...powder to the air and people breath them ,there would cause a very serious health ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 991.0 1373.03311258 72% => OK
No of words: 204.0 270.72406181 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85784313725 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55878127078 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 145.348785872 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573529411765 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 306.9 419.366225166 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.530518831 49.2860985944 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.111111111 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06452816374 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182958411365 0.272083759551 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769574520505 0.0996497079465 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644822941801 0.0662205650399 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119411634912 0.162205337803 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00106355574232 0.0443174109184 2% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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