Friendship is one of the most important part of our life. Having good friends around brings more pleasure to our life. While some believe it is more important to make new friends and have fun all the time, others think keeping old friends is more advantagous. I think keeping old friends is more important and my reasons go as follows.
First of all, old friends have past history together. Their friendship is based on mutual interest. Thus, this makes it easier to know their personality and their behavior. They can get along easier. In other words, due to having more time to evaluate each other in different situation they have better underestanding . Therefore, they would have fewer misunderstandings and struggles . For example, when I spend my time with my old friends which I know them very well, I have less conflict and more joy in that time because we know about our sentivisities and thresholds and try not to cross the line. We past our conflicts and reached to the point that noting is more important than our friendship. So, With fewer arguments , we would have more fun and pleasure every time. Therefore, although making new friends help us to have more experience and access to verity of opinions , it can destroy our joy by conflicts and arguments due not knowing each other well. As you can see, being with old friends is more predictable and desirable.
Moreover, due to having more time for evaluation, old friends are more trustworthy and reliable. In fact, old friends usually are better fit for having honest relationship. In other words, time is a good way of assessing the reliability of people. Most people show their real personality and charactristic during time when first impression fades away and reality reveals. For instance, when I have serious problem in my work or life ,I can confide in my old friend who is honest and loyal but this never occur with my new friends which I do not know them for a long time. Eventhough my old friends are far from me and there is long distance between us , they always have time for me and listen to my words carefully and patiently. This experiences show that we can tell our secret only to our longlasting friends who are reliable and we can trust them.
In addition, old friends are more helpful and can give better advice. In other words, old friends know more about our weaknesses and strengths. So, their suggestions are based on longlasting friendship and are more realistic. For example, in time of need my old friend are always my good and reliable consultants and i can get their advice even from far distance. They showed their behaviour during time and i can count on them in any situation. I always received best support from my old friends side.They are for me like a precious gem. On the other hand, new friends do not know me very well and i can not count on their help and support in difficult and complicated situations. Because they know me for a short time, they may not give practical or even convenient advice. As you can see, we can have more support and help from our old friends.
In conclusion, eventhough making new friends brings more excitement and experience to our life,keeping old friends are more important. Not only they are more reliable but are also more helpful . We feel intimate and safe when we are around them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 36.0 13.8261648746 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2750.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 582.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72508591065 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91168771031 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61596027944 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.400343642612 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 833.4 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.7171038548 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.8823529412 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1176470588 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61764705882 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 31.0 11.8709677419 261% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231191714593 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818856277406 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799684649323 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189701589743 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724373045966 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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