TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

In the lecture, the professor makes a series of points that cast doubt on all the tree suggested solusions presented in the reading passage.The author gives solusion for changing the glass in the buildings to keep the birds safe. The professor states no one of the solusions will work.
First of all, in contrast to the author's claim about making one way glass that could be helpful, the speaker states is not working for birds. He believes this kind of glasses work as mirror. So the birds become confused and would fly toward it and they will be in harm and injured.
Second, the professor says the colorful design can be helpful either. The people can see from the opening out but the birds could see an open hole.So they try to fly right through the hole and will be injured.However small colorful strips can diminish this drawback for birds but for people the glass would be too dark.
Lastly, the professor oposes using magnetic feilds in building due to the fact that birds only use this ability for long trip. In fact, however birds use magnetic feild for migration in long trip before winter, they do not use it in the short trip. So they use eyes and brightnerss of light in short trip and this chang in building is useless.

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Average: 6.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 141, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...usions presented in the reading passage.The author gives solusion for changing the ...
^^^
Line 3, column 147, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...ut but the birds could see an open hole.So they try to fly right through the hole ...
^^
Line 3, column 209, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ht through the hole and will be injured.However small colorful strips can diminish this...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 210, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...or migration in long trip before winter, they do not use it in the short trip. So...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, lastly, second, so, in contrast, in fact, in short, kind of, first of all, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 12.0772626932 25% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1020.0 1373.03311258 74% => OK
No of words: 222.0 270.72406181 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59459459459 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2550793068 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 145.348785872 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563063063063 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 294.3 419.366225166 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.55342163355 84% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.2197056111 49.2860985944 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06452816374 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415951355352 0.272083759551 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153537554027 0.0996497079465 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854132165237 0.0662205650399 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239115780527 0.162205337803 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107926248772 0.0443174109184 244% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 53.8541721854 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.2367328918 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.42419426049 89% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 63.6247240618 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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