TPO-45 - Integrated Writing Task Any student of paleontology will be struck by the fact that a great many animals of the past were considerably larger than they are today. This holds true for species ranging from dinosaurs to most mammals. Just why they w

The lecturer talks about the proposed theories mentioned in the passage giving explanation of why the animals had a larger size in history. The lecturer considers the theories to be irrelevant with lack of scientific evidence. The lecturer casts various doubts to the theories by putting forth scientific explanations.

In the first theory, the passage states that the large size of the animals was due to abundant supply of oxygen in the earth’s early environment. This statement in the passage is supported by point that oxygen rich environments stimulate growth and produce array of large animal varieties. The lecturer opposes the claim by stating that the volcanic eruptions during the early times caused spread of harmful gases in the earth’s environment, thus reducing the oxygen content in the
atmosphere. This claim made by the lecturer thus weakens the explanation put forth in the first passage.

Second theory points that the availability of plant life served as a source of nutrition to the early animals thus helping them to grow efficiently. As the size increase is genetically transmitted through generations, the passage states that the size of animals will tend to grow as long as there is enough supply of nutrition rich food. This lecture contradicts thid hypothesis stating that even though there was abundance of plant food on earth in early times the nutrition content was very low. The gases contaminants reduced the nutrition value in the food. Thus with this claim of the lecturer the theory loses its creditability.

Thirdly the passage states that the warm climate on earth in the early times stimulated growth in animals, as the animals did not expend much energy and the excess energy would be used to generate cells needed for larger body. The lecturer on the other hand disapproves this theory and considers it nonsensical. He states that majority of animals tend to live in warmer regions and not all have larger body. On the other hand the large size of animals turns out to be disadvantageous for animals as it requires more energy to cool itself and hence requires more food to meet the need for more energy. With these claims and their scientific explanation the lecturer weakens the theories in the passage.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...evant with lack of scientific evidence. The lecturer casts various doubts to the th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...putting forth scientific explanations. In the first theory, the passage states ...
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Line 4, column 492, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... thus reducing the oxygen content in the atmosphere. This claim made by the lectu...
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Line 7, column 563, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...educed the nutrition value in the food. Thus with this claim of the lecturer the the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, second, so, third, thirdly, thus, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 30.3222958057 178% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1373.03311258 138% => OK
No of words: 372.0 270.72406181 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10483870968 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70692784845 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451612903226 0.540411800872 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 419.366225166 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4605501462 49.2860985944 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.705882353 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05882352941 7.06452816374 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353613077239 0.272083759551 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117219626725 0.0996497079465 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922357112854 0.0662205650399 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185797077949 0.162205337803 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106578507648 0.0443174109184 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.3589403974 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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