TPO 46 Integerated
The reading claims that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based records. However, the lecture finds all the ideas dubious and presents some evidences to refute them all.
First, the reading passage asserts that using electronic system reduces costs and leads to saving money. In fact, in that way no space will be needed, it is easy to access, duplicate and transfer them. As a result, this system's costs are much less than the recent system. In contrast, the lecture brings up the idea that cost saving are unlikely significant as the reading suggests. Doctors do not throw out papers and they will keep them as emergency backup. They would be needed for legal reasons. Hence, they still have to pay storage costs. .
Second, the author alleges that electronic system will help reduce the chance of medical errors. In fact, human errors in handwriting would be reduced. Conversely, the professor underlines the fact that this system cannot eliminate errors caused by poor handwriting. Most of doctors still use paper and pen to write prescriptions by hand. It is usually the office staff who will enter this hand-written information in electronic systems. Hence, staff members have to interpret them and as a result, poor handwriting can still lead to errors.
Finally, the reading argues that gathering large amount of data is possible by the electronic system. In addition, it is accessible from any research location. On the contrary, the speaker dismisses the issue due to the fact that it will not be beneficial since, access to all medical resources sometimes are not allowed. It is subjected to privacy laws that allow patients to keep medical information private. Collecting data follows strict procedures and such permissions are not granted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...plicate and transfer them. As a result, this systems costs are much less than the re...
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Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
..., they still have to pay storage costs. . Second, the author alleges that ele...
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Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the doctors') or simply say ''Most doctors''.
Suggestion: Most of the doctors; Most doctors
...nate errors caused by poor handwriting. Most of doctors still use paper and pen to write prescr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, first, hence, however, if, second, so, still, in addition, in contrast, in fact, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 293.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25255972696 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64106173529 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597269624573 0.540411800872 111% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.5808637467 49.2860985944 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.95 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.65 21.698381199 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06452816374 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386264239459 0.272083759551 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976138997014 0.0996497079465 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101036374828 0.0662205650399 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219956354926 0.162205337803 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655595034557 0.0443174109184 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 53.8541721854 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.0289183223 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 63.6247240618 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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