TPO 49
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
From the dawn of civilization, relationship between people of a society has been a pivotal issue. It is paramount importance that how these relationships are being shaped and also lasting of them is crucial point. Some people are of the opinion that maintaining friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for enjoying life. While, other people agree with this idea that making many new friends easily is the ability to make each person happy. I firmly agree with the latter view. The following paragraphs will aptly vindicate my point of view.
The most prominent point to be mentioned is that making good friends takes a lot of time. In fact, to be familiar with new people is a crucial issue that depends on a myriad of factors. All the characteristic of a person cannot be determined in a short period of time. It is better to spend more time to apt a small group of people as friends instead of wasting time to search for a nice and trustful person. Taking myself as an example, when I was a high-school student, I just tried to find a friend that has some common characteristics and interests. After a short period of time, I became familiar with a nice girl that we are in contact until now.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that the closer the friends are, the more faithful they are. In other words, it is crystal clear that each person needs a partner that can trust easily. They should be able to talk to each other so frankly. Moreover, they should try to have a nice time and be glad when they are altogether. Recent psychological studies at the university of Minnesota revealed that people who try to be friend solely with small groups are more prosperous in the future. In fact, it shows that they have some specific criteria for opting their determined friends. In this way, they can rely on each other and help to be successful. Therefore, ones that achieves his/her goals makes the other prosper too.
In conclusion, based on all the aforementioned into account, I am strongly consus that number of friends should be limited. Not only the organized friendship is somehow time-consuming, but also it leads to a success for both sides. However, in this hectic life, making a desirable friendship takes time, it is recommended to spend more time in selecting them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 280, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...inion that maintaining friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is mo...
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Line 1, column 317, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...th a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for enjoying life. Wh...
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Line 1, column 369, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...me is more important for enjoying life. While, other people agree with this idea that...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... person cannot be determined in a short period of time. It is better to spend more time to apt...
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Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...cteristics and interests. After a short period of time, I became familiar with a nice girl tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, frankly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72195121951 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70051441549 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519512195122 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.1514381417 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1739130435 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8260869565 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04347826087 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334815709463 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889200052705 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0974871552564 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210662863334 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120613198014 0.0645574589148 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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