In the USA, government is going to adopt a rule to record patient information electronically. The lecturer and the reading passage offer three opposing views on storing medical records in electronic databases rather than on paper. While there are some reasons stated in the reading passage that support this idea, the lecturer casts some doubts on these reasons.
First, the lecturer asserts that this method would not reduce the costs. Although it is mentioned in the reading passage that using this method will reduce the expenditures related to storing the papers, the lecturer states that most of doctors will keep everyone’s medical information on papers for backups. She says doctors should keep some papers with their signature on for some legal reasons too. So, this method would not do anything with storage expenses.
Next, the lecturer says that using this method would not efface errors related too poor writing. She believes that doctors will keep using examination papers because they want to take some notes by pen when they are examining patients. While it is stated in the reading passage that using some standard electronic forms would declines errors, the lecturer mentions that not doctors but their staffs enter the information in the electronics system, and the wrong information may continue to exist in this way too.
Finally, the lecturer claims that the electronic database would not allow other people to access them since there are some strict privacy rules which impede others from obtaining patients' information. Although it is mentioned in the reading passage that researchers can draw their needed information from these databases, the lecturer says that the patients' information are utterly private and they can block the accessibility of others to this information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the doctors') or simply say ''most doctors''.
Suggestion: most of the doctors; most doctors
...ng the papers, the lecturer states that most of doctors will keep everyone's medical infor...
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Line 5, column 327, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'decline'
Suggestion: decline
...ng some standard electronic forms would declines errors, the lecturer mentions that not ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 350, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...e databases, the lecturer says that the patients information are utterly private and the...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, may, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 286.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34965034965 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56396481936 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 467.1 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.9477047738 49.2860985944 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.5 110.228320801 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 21.698381199 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91666666667 7.06452816374 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287643364088 0.272083759551 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11096556827 0.0996497079465 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877237066749 0.0662205650399 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182524121772 0.162205337803 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651485544088 0.0443174109184 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.