The most important issue about children all around the world is how parents have to pay attention to them. nowadays parents have a lot of tasks to do, so, this may induce them no to expend adequate time with their children. there is a drastic contrast between people on whether it is better to do fun playing games and sports or to use the free times doing things together related to school works. although it is contradicted by many that it is not a good idea using the leisure time to have fun, I inclined to believe that parents should utilize their free time to do fun games and sports with children. There are some reasons led me to prefer this idea.
In my opinion, the first and most crucial reason is that playing is not just for fun. playing games specifically board games let the children learn some lessons too. there are vast kinds of notion ideas behind designing the games. so, these ideas would help children to feel a robust potential and self-confidence to make ideal decisions in playing, and also in their activities in the future. as a tangible example, a scientific research undertaken by psychology faculty of University of Toronto has asserted that children abilities to do their personal tasks and affairs in positively correlated to how often they play games and have fun times in a week. so, it can be resulted that playing games will help children in different aspects of life.
Furthermore, another reason which has to be considered is that children's feeling is utterly depended on how often they spend time with their parents. as the amount of time parents and children have together get lesser, the children are exposed to mental disease more. playing funny games would lead children to benefit from thrilling and happier time and may impose them being more mentally healthier. to illustrate more I will state an example based on my personal life. when I was a little child, my parents did not have enough time to spend with me. so I got mentally sick. when my parents counsiled with a doctor, he proposed my parents to buy some board games for me and after that, I started to be better gradually. so, I profoundly believe that parents need to exert the time, playing games with children.
Which attitude is really more efficient? using free time to play with children or doing tasks related to school work. Drawing upon the reasons --playing is not just for fun-- and -- being mentally healthier--, although there are always some reasons which are excluded from the general rule, I am to a large extent on the belief that, parents have to use their free time playing funny games and sports with their children. by doing these task they would help children to have more effective abilities such as making decisions and also help them be healthier.
- TPO 54 3
- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- TPO 46 Integerated 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. 76
- TPO 54 Integrated Writing 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, may, really, so, as to, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74845360825 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42419754344 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463917525773 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.7048063555 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.130434783 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0869565217 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30434782609 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.447920129794 0.236089414692 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139640159997 0.076458572812 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119834280994 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.310011463483 0.150856017488 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101062700515 0.0645574589148 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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