TPO44 independent
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, most parents have to work full time to earn a living and support their families, leaving their children alone at school or at home, or having a babysitter or someone else to take care of the children; the time that they can spend with their kids is extremely short and precious. Thus, some believe that busy parents should make use of that time to have fun with their children, while other holds that it is better to spend the time doing schoolwork together. Personally speaking, I think the former is more favorable because it can help both parents and their children to relax and foster the relationship between them.
To begin with, playing games or sports is a good way to loosen up and create sweet memories. As a working parent, one might work around or even above eight hours every day during which he needs to deal with endless tasks, varying from attending meetings to replying emails. This is the reason why they often feel exhausted when back to home and the relaxing atmosphere, some leisure time and activities, are all they want there. Instead of facing the laborious and complicated homework like creating an atom model and solving an algebraic equation, on which the teachers can offer better help, playing games or sports is more likely to motivate them patiently spend high-quality time with their kid. For a child, on the other hand, happy childhood memories are always the best for their mental as well as physical development. For example, I always remember my first outstate trip to Xinjiang with my mother when I was seven, which is also my first time to take a flight. Ten years have passed yet I could still recall the excitement when I took aboard the airplane and I also learned to behave properly in public areas like that.
Moreover, spending playful time foster a harmonious relationship between parents and their children. Light-hearted family activities, such as playing games or sports, watching TV programs or simply having a family dinner together, can create a refreshing feeling and make it easy for them to talk about their problems that are usually hard to say like failed tests, love affairs and bad bosses. Through the frank conversation and the exchange of ideas and advice, parents and their kids can further understand each other and think from each other's perspective. For instance, I used to consider my parents as outdated because they hate Hollywood movies while I like them, and I would rather go to the cinema with my friends or even by myself to watch those latest released movies. Earlier this year, however, my parents and I watched the movie Jurassic World together and they appreciated how impressive the graphic effects are. It was then that I start to change my stereotype that they were too old-fashioned to enjoy such movies and to have fun with them more frequently.
In the final analysis, although parents can help their children with study and know about their academic performance by doing schoolwork together, they may be incompetent to provide professional instruction on some subjects and may even give misguidance in some difficult problems. Therefore, I believe parents who are busy with work should better use the valuable spare time to have fun with their kids because it can be a great relief and it is beneficial to develop an amicable parent-child relationship.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 37, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
Nowadays, most parents have to work full time to earn a living and support their fami...
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Line 5, column 542, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...derstand each other and think from each others perspective. For instance, I used to co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 13.8261648746 246% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2790.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 567.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92063492063 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57133179768 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537918871252 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 849.6 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.5799440254 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.0 100.406767564 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5 20.6045352989 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372093620483 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117554482528 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110379319892 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245930191583 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0871207397316 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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