TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

Based on the given materials, the article as well as the lecture discusses uses of electronic medical databases which contains patient's medical information, and many doctors tend to adopt this modern method of recording. The author states that there are several viable benefits regarding this method in compared to storing information on papers. That being said, the lecturer provides several ideas to repudiate this claim.
Initially, the author says that since paper records need noticeable amounts of storage, using electronic records would decrease costs of storage. In addition, the process of getting access to patient's information, such as copying and faxing, will be emitted. However, the lecturer explains that it cannot be true owing to the fact that doctors who adapted to use the electronic database will not throw out or discontinue the paper-based information, because they require signatures on papers for legal backups. Thus, the mentioned doctors still pay storage costs, and the modern method will not lead to reduce the costs.
Second, the writer proclaims that if doctors use the electronic medical records, there will be seen fewer medical errors which may be caused by insufficient handwriting and transcription of data. Yet again, the speaker underscores that most doctors, even who adapted to electronic medical records, still use pen and papers for taking notes, and because they usually transfer data from their notes to the database, there should have been errors during this process.
The final point of contention between the reading and the listening passage is aiding medical researchers. The writer thinks that since there is a huge database for researchers, they easily get access to required information from any location. On the other hand, the speaker explains that even with this modern method, it seems to be difficult for researchers to get the information, owing to the fact that most of this information are private and need legal acceptance, which is a time-consuming process.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, regarding, second, still, thus, well, as to, in addition, such as, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1373.03311258 124% => OK
No of words: 318.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37106918239 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70180510048 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547169811321 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 419.366225166 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.3133472832 49.2860985944 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.333333333 110.228320801 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 21.698381199 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06452816374 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38817976486 0.272083759551 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124135172832 0.0996497079465 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837885268633 0.0662205650399 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214718717109 0.162205337803 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659818099585 0.0443174109184 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.3589403974 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 53.8541721854 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 63.6247240618 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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