The reading and the lecture both about Mars travel in the coming decades. The reading states that maybe sending humans to Moon was easy; however, Mars would be difficult mission. The lecture builds upon these some ideas to give more comprehensive picture with three examples.
First of all, according to the reading it is hard to maintain enough supplies of food, water, and a oxygen due to the fact that round trip to Mars requires at least two years. However, the lecturer disputes this point. She says that this problem is already decided by scientist. To put it more simply, astronauts will cultivate their food, recycle waste water and thanks to carbon dioxide they can breath fresh air regardless of time.
Secondly, the reading states that spending a lot of time in the zero gravity will be resulted in decreased muscle mass and lower bone density. Nevertheless, the lecture refutes this argument. She argues that many astronauts who already travelled zero gravity in long time invented a few techniques such as regular exercise will protect decreasing muscle mass and using calcium is one way to prevent lower bone density.
Finally, the reading claims that space radiation is dangerous to astronauts who has mission to Mars and shield can't protect shift properly. On the other hand, the lecturer believe that space radiation is not perilous all the time and nowadays travellers can shielded fully.
In conclusion, the reading and lecture have conflicting opinions about mission to Mars , the three main point made in the reading are effectively challenged by the lecturer.
- TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rem 80
- TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso 76
- TPO 54- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. 76
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 180, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...wever, Mars would be difficult mission. The lecture builds upon these some ideas to...
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Line 2, column 99, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ain enough supplies of food, water, and a oxygen due to the fact that round trip ...
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Line 2, column 399, Rule ID: BREATHE_BREATH[1]
Message: Did you mean 'breathe'? 'breath' is a noun.
Suggestion: breathe
...r and thanks to carbon dioxide they can breath fresh air regardless of time. Secondly...
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Line 4, column 112, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...auts who has mission to Mars and shield cant protect shift properly. On the other ha...
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Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nflicting opinions about mission to Mars , the three main point made in the readin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, as to, at least, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1325.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 260.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09615384615 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49247778353 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611538461538 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5918169149 49.2860985944 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.923076923 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9230769231 7.06452816374 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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